我都笑抽了,大家呢?

吉木春
楼主 (北美华人网)
A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door opens he saw a charming nurse inside,he walked in and pressed the light of ground floor on,weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3,the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on.
  ''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
  ''Oh my god,She had the tab on her wrist!''Answered the docter in horror.
  ''What's wrong with it?''with more ___on the nurse's face.
  ''There has a morgue in the basement and the dead bodies in it are marked with our hospital's tabs tying to their right wrist!Didn't you know that?''
  ''Oh please~,calm down that's not a big deal,i have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised her wrist to the docter with a玩味的笑on her face.
  ''OH FUCK!''The docter眼里闪过一道寒光.
  
  不懂请看完原贴,谢谢大家了,还有问题的解答在这贴继续,欢迎大家捧场!
  原贴:大家帮我填一个英文单词https://m.huaren.us/showtopic.html?topicid=2531501
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applelegend
好老坛的鬼故事,为什么是玩味?
吉木春
还有我写的英文有什么毛病大家尽管挑好了。虽然自我感觉良好,你们再挑的话就是鸡蛋里挑骨头了,但也无妨了真挑出来了我也算学习一下。
吉木春
回复 2楼applelegend的帖子
看了原贴你就知道了,知道其中的来龙去脉后,你可能会笑,之前我读到最后那两句带中文的时候,就噗的一声情不自禁。
通商宽衣001
虽然你不想听,但你的英文真的很不地道,读下来能把人憋死。
吉木春
回复 5楼通商宽衣001的帖子 你说的挺好,是事实。我的自然英文累积量不够,写文大部分是学会的单词或查字典去拼凑组合写文所以会让人读起来生涩,和那种自然英语环境下无声无息吸收和自然流露的语言组织能力还是有差距的,我会努力向自然的方向靠拢了,现在暂时没办法,只能这样不要在语法上有太大的错误,凑合着学点词汇。像我这样想要在文字上写的生动,活灵活现的,成功率几乎为零。希望你和大家能够将就我,发挥下想象力,能体会到我分享的快乐。
吉木春
望大家看完我那原贴,给我在帖子里留下的那些问题多多赐教,给我创作些学习新词汇和语句的机会,以我的词汇量机会的出现会是大概率了,即使你的答案不是我理想的那个。在这我先谢谢了你们了!请给我留言。
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realpangxie
第一句话就读不下去了。国内高中毕业的都写不出这个语法错误。 就第一句,麻烦说一下主语是谁。主从句在哪里?
吉木春
回复 8楼realpangxie的帖子
我明白了!之前也有很多人说到这一句,我知道这么改了,我去发新贴等下你也去看看。谢谢了!
吉木春
一天只能发一个主题贴,算了我把改好的发这把,下文等下我也得看看了看来。还有大家请继续帮我看文章,还有括号有人填出了本人目前觉得最理想的frown,感觉还是差那么一点点非常少了,请大家继续,如果找不出来的话我会把frown用进去。最后就是那两句中文的翻译了。谢谢各位了。 我的修改:A doctor was going home after the work was done.In the elevator he saw a charming nurse and pressed the light of ground floor on. 而且句号的位置也有修改,之前有人就说过这个问题我没留意。还有谢谢之前那些给我留言说到这些的人,之前我大意了,自信过度,没当回事,真是对不住了。
吉木春
我修改后的2: weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3.the door opens,a granny was standing there .
吉木春
贴上我修改之后的全片文章,我修改后的3:把work和tab前的the去掉,那才是我的本意。   A doctor was going home after work was done.In the elevator he saw a charming nurse and pressed the light of ground floor on.weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3.the door opens,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on.
  ''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
  ''Oh my god,She had tab on her wrist!''Answered the docter in horror.
  ''What's wrong with it?''with more ___on the nurse's face.
  ''There has a morgue in the basement and the dead bodies in it are marked with our hospital's tabs tying to their right wrist!Didn't you know that?''
  ''Oh please~,calm down that's not a big deal,i have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised the wrist to the docter with a玩味的笑on her face.
  ''OH FUCK!''The docter眼里闪过一道寒光.
吉木春
还有一处需要修改,and the elevator moved on改成then the elevator moves on,全篇的修改应该结束了吧?看你们还什么好说的没。
吉木春
我把全句贴一下:The doctor rushed to press the door close button,then the elevator moves on.