我在译写一个小故事,不会一个单词,下文下划线那里,要写的的是with 疑惑 on her face 或不解也行,请大家结合前文给写出那个单词,在这先谢谢了! A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door open he saw a charming nurse inside and he came in.The elevator kept moving down when it had reached the ground,until to the B3 the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on,the nurse asked with ___ on her face:''why did you not let her in?''
我在译写一个小故事,不会一个单词,下文下划线那里,要写的的是with 疑惑 on her face 或不解也行,请大家结合前文给写出那个单词,在这先谢谢了! A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door open he saw a charming nurse inside and he came in.The elevator kept moving down when it had reached the ground,until to the B3 the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on,the nurse asked with ___ on her face:''why did you not let her in?''
吉木春 发表于 4/10/2020 9:14:43 AM
第一句建议楼主不要用“电梯门开了,and he came in" 读着有性暗示。时态也要注意。
填空处____ to 你再读读你写的,B3那有歧义啊,医生到底是在电梯里还是不在,不在的话难道他灵魂出窍了?嗯,就这样。
The elevator kept moving down when it had reached the ground,until to the B3 the door opened,a granny was standing there . 这句好像时态也有问题吧 when后面为什么用过去完成时?然后又加了until?
受welkin25兄台的启示,我在译写的时候想起他说两句话,结果用在里面自我感觉那两句达到了precise的程度。暂时还没翻译出来,那两句难度也不小,和下划线那一样都先搁一搁,下次再说。下面是我刚才完成的大家都来看看,欢迎留言。最后谢谢welkin25兄台,一看兄台就像饱读小说之人,一出口就来了两句这么经典的,佩服!如果说的不对还请多包涵! A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door opens he saw a charming nurse inside,he walked in and pressed the light of ground floor on,weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3,the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on. ''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face. ''Oh my god,She had the tab on her wrist!''Answered the docter in horror. ''What's wrong with it?''with more ___on the nurse's face. ''There has morgue in the basement and the dead bodies in it are marked with our hospital's tabs tying to their right wrist!Didn't you know that?'' ''Oh please~,calm down that's not a big deal,i have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised her wrist to the docter with a 玩味的笑 on her face. ''OH FUCK!''The docter 眼里闪过一道寒光.
我在译写一个小故事,不会一个单词,下文下划线那里,要写的的是with 疑惑 on her face 或不解也行,请大家结合前文给写出那个单词,在这先谢谢了! A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door open he saw a charming nurse inside and he came in.The elevator kept moving down when it had reached the ground,until to the B3 the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on,the nurse asked with ___ on her face:''why did you not let her in?''
吉木春 发表于 4/10/2020 9:14:43 AM
妹子, 这是adult school 的ESL level4-5的作业吗? 好多年前做过tutor, 这篇作文能用红笔由第一句开始一路X到底.
我在译写一个小故事,不会一个单词,下文下划线那里,要写的的是with 疑惑 on her face 或不解也行,请大家结合前文给写出那个单词,在这先谢谢了! A doctor was going to go home after the work was done,he went to the elevator,when the door open he saw a charming nurse inside and he came in.The elevator kept moving down when it had reached the ground,until to the B3 the door opened,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button and the elevator moved on,the nurse asked with ___ on her face:''why did you not let her in?''
第一句建议楼主不要用“电梯门开了,and he came in" 读着有性暗示。时态也要注意。
填空处____ to
你再读读你写的,B3那有歧义啊,医生到底是在电梯里还是不在,不在的话难道他灵魂出窍了?嗯,就这样。
第一句的问题是,我们是站在医生视角看着医生进电梯的,所以应该是went in而不是came in。came in那得是叙述一开始就是从电梯内部开始
你的问题是为什么一定要这个句式,表情清清楚楚写在脸上真的让人想起“玩味的笑”“眼里闪过一道寒光”
简单的 Confused, the nurse asked, ... 就可以了
''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
''Oh my god,She had the tab on her wrist!''Answered the docter in horror.
''What's wrong with it?''with more ___on the nurse's face.
''There has morgue in the basement and the dead bodies in it are marked with our hospital's tabs tying to their right wrist!Didn't you know that?''
''Oh please~,calm down that's not a big deal,i have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised her wrist to the docter with a 玩味的笑 on her face.
''OH FUCK!''The docter 眼里闪过一道寒光.
妹子, 这是adult school 的ESL level4-5的作业吗? 好多年前做过tutor, 这篇作文能用红笔由第一句开始一路X到底.
楼主你的问题是有太多 run on sentence。多用句号少用逗号。你这个看着喘不上气来。
哈哈哈 加得很到位
玩味的笑可以是 a meaningful smile... 我觉得meaningful跟玩味一样啥意思都能往里面塞
打击一下,语法错误和用词不当的地方不少。楼上给的... semiotics发表于20-04-11 01:03
不会吧,俩位朋友有没有看完全贴?你们是在说原贴还是之后我修改后的。perplexed意思有点接近了,这个词的同词根名词好像不合适填在with ___on her face那里,用个组合的perplexed +某个单词填在那里虽然可以但是我不太想那样子也不是我原来想要的效果,况且这个单词也不是那个precise one。
astonishment我就不多说了,估计兄台没看完全贴。
最后还是谢谢你们的留言!也谢谢刚才 留言的朋友catgoose和tbaobao 也还请你们多多包涵!有些话题我就不回复讨论了,偷懒一下。
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