青松站

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楼主 (文学城)

你在青松下站着 
等春暖季节里的花开捧出岁月的邂逅

阳光正亮,三月的天空正高
你的姿势在微风中轻漾
恰若上水一方的倩影波浪
火车刚到,小站的人流来往
你守着每一次不能错过的相遇

你是一个高原上的小站
你没有名字,你是传奇

青松站
^_,多谢邻兄,.送个美女帖回礼-,.盈盈他们会明白~足球人生,.越战越勇,.对爱专一一..永不放弃……

Lyrics Don't let the sun catch you cryin' 
The night's the time for all your tears 
Your heart may be broken tonight 
But tomorrow in the morning light 
Don't let the sun catch you cryin'  The night-time shadows disappear 
And with them go all your tears 
For the morning will bring joy 
For every girl and boy 
So don't let the sun catch you cryin'  We know that cryin's not a bad thing 
But stop your cryin' when the birds sing  It may be hard to discover 
That you've been left for another 
But don't forget that love's a game 
And it can always come again 
Oh don't let the sun catch you cryin' 
Don't let the sun catch you cryin', oh no 
Oh, oh, oh Source: LyricFind Songwriters: Fred Marsden / Gerry Marsden / Les Chadwick / Patrick Maguire Don't Let The Sun Catch You Crying lyrics © Universal Music Publishing Group   Available on
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Description ArtistGerry and the Pacemakers AlbumDon’t Let the Sun Catch You Crying Released: 1964 Genre: Vocal/Easy Listening Other recordings of this song Don't Let the Sun Catch You Crying Paul Carrack · 2010 Don't Let the Sun Catch You Crying José Feliciano · 1968 Don't Let the Sun Catch You Crying Rickie Lee Jones · 1989
n
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歌词阳光。enjoy
尘凡无忧
写得太克制,缺少了近氏深情。。。LOL
n
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刚刚改了。近氏情诗得有特定的感觉才行 :-)
n
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请青松再读一遍,完全改了下,参仿了无忧的'过客'
尘凡无忧
嗯,比刚才好很多。最后一行可以不用写出来。。。个见啊。:)
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听无忧的
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FionaRawson
有道理。其实我觉得“你是 ......”也可以去掉。就“人人皆知”结尾就很好啦。
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lovecat08
喜欢青松站,气质和善良,也有才气。
n
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再改了一下,请高妹与无忧再帮忙看看结尾?Thanks
n
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她是点赞仙女
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FionaRawson
改得很好!格式上还可以再错落一些?

我不会写诗,看别人写的比较错落。你看看这样喜不喜欢(抛砖引玉)。

你在青松下站着 
等春暖季节里的花开,捧出
岁月的邂逅

阳光正亮,三月的天空正高
你的姿势在微风中
轻漾
恰若上水一方的倩影波浪
火车刚到,小站的人流来往
你守着每一次不能错过的相遇
凝望

你是一个高原上的小站
没有名字,却已成传说

n
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很好呢,读后让我又想改几个字。谢谢
青松站
-:)..-:)))..