【周日游吟】不酒罚作(双语)

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renqiulan
楼主 (文学城)

(平水韵七律)

江南第一醉香楼,
客啖黃花片片秋。
天下寒霜归鬓角,
尘间清月出心头。
无诗不犯当朝怒,
有酒何消古国愁?
梦送渊明歌易水,*
入秦轻驾武陵舟。


*陶潜有诗咏荆轲

 

金陵/南京

 

Was Jinling a Dream?

Late into the night, I couldn't tear my eyes away from the laptop screen. The pavilion in my digital creation seemed to throb with life, its image growing larger, blocking the concrete high-rises.

Out of curiosity, I reached out to touch the screen, my fingers passing through the glass. A cool, smooth sensation lingered, as if I had touched the surface of a still pond. Before I could react, the image enveloped me, and I found myself standing on the pavilion's steps, the night air caressing my skin.

Modern Nanjing had vanished, replaced by a landscape of serene gardens and moonlit waters. I heard distant murmurs and the gentle tinkling of chimes.

 

 

An elderly gentleman in a silk robe approached. His presence was dignified and commanding, as if he were the very essence of this ancient world. "I am the Spirit of Jinling," he said. "You, ren-qiu-lan, have bridged the past and present. Your image was no mere art. It was a portal, uniting two worlds that are not so different."

The Spirit of Jinling smiled and invited me to join him. "Wine will flow, though I suspect you might prefer tea." I nodded gratefully. He then informed me that, as a nondrinker, I would need to submit a classical poem as my passport back to my world. Not a bad trade-off, considering the circumstances.


图/文:纫秋兰

 

 

 

 

蓝灵
写古典格律诗最要是什么呢?
r
renqiulan
我沒有资格回答。只能说,多读多揣摩。
蓝灵
秋兰谦成了这个样子,怎样交流下去呢?
r
renqiulan
还在介乎“推门”与“敲门”之间,所以不好说,否则就容易胡说。
蓝灵
尾联“梦送渊明歌易水,入秦轻驾武陵舟”,这是个什么梦?
云霞姐姐
哇,坐前排,读好诗
r
renqiulan
辛弃疾万分佩服陶渊明,说他“风流酷似、卧龙诸葛”,颇有‘’伏枥‘’的弦外之音。
r
renqiulan
事实上,渊明的《咏荆轲》,确是道出‘’士为知己者死‘’、豪气干云,舍身不屈的一代传奇人物。
r
renqiulan
所以我想,“归去来兮”的隐士,心底很可能与“视死如归”的壮士气息相通的。
r
renqiulan
因此,借个梦,引只武陵舟,让他入秦而非避秦,闯咸京而非进桃源。
老林子里的夏天
如期而至,精彩无比。‘入秦轻驾武陵舟’句绝妙,以历史典故轻描于笔下,意境如游崇山峻岭般悠远广阔,轻驾其上,
老林子里的夏天
正是‘武陵舟上的桃花源’。
蓝灵
知你意犹未尽,请继续发挥,说说诗。
r
renqiulan
诗嘛,只要合乎內在逻辑,何妨尽情扩大想象空间?
蓝灵
问好云儿!
蓝灵
....
云霞姐姐
有典故的诗,借景抒情,忧国忧民,感觉到了
蓝灵
善哉!小妹谢谢醍醐灌顶。
云霞姐姐
哎呀妈呀,俺也悟到啦“平水韵七律”指:每行七个字,平平水平,韵?
老林子里的夏天
妙啊!
r
renqiulan
姑娘言重,真不敢当。
r
renqiulan
云儿周日晚上好!感谢鼓励。
r
renqiulan
再谢。
r
renqiulan
林子这话可圈可点。
r
renqiulan
云儿知我意。秋兰虽非华裔,然而深慕古国人文主义文化,恐其衰微。
A
AP33912
莫愁lakeside秋兰sits,roundtrips to 唐宋 cost 首诗。
云霞姐姐
小R你最棒,这诗,都很精采,将来出个诗集,我们星坛坛友都是第一读者,偷偷骄傲一下,嘻嘻
r
renqiulan
云儿登堂了。还记得《红楼梦》里有不少论诗斗诘的描写。对呀,用平水韵,平上去入四声分明。不过,普通话欠了入声,不好弄。
r
renqiulan
莫愁湖畔莫愁兰,一夜秋寒笑不寒。
r
renqiulan
揖谢,同志仍须努力。
r
renqiulan
感谢阿普一路支持!
蓝灵
The idea of a digital image acting as a portal is quite
蓝灵
captivating.
r
renqiulan
I wanted to explore the intersection of modernity and
r
renqiulan
and tradition, especially in a place like Nanjing.
蓝灵
The Spirit of Jinling mentions that the two worlds "are not
蓝灵
so different after all." Can you elaborate on this theme?
r
renqiulan
The essence of human experience remains consistent
r
renqiulan
across time.
蓝灵
Does that make sense of your ID?
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laopika
那张金陵照,可是秦淮河边夫子庙?:)
r
renqiulan
Absolutely. My ID "renqiulan" is a nod to classical Chinese
r
renqiulan
literature. It refers to autumn orchids, symbolizing
r
renqiulan
elegance past and present. Am I living up to it? I hope so.
蓝灵
Why was the pavilion scene so vivid?
r
renqiulan
I wanted readers to feel my awe.
蓝灵
Why did you choose poetry as the medium for your challenge?
r
renqiulan
In this story, poetry serves as both a challenge and a
r
renqiulan
connection, tying me to the classical world I’ve entered.
蓝灵
The condition to write a classical poem as a way back to
蓝灵
modern times is intriguing.
r
renqiulan
It’s a transformative experience.
蓝灵
How did you blend the past and present without overwhelming
蓝灵
the narrative?
r
renqiulan
The key was to let my experience guide the narrative.
r
renqiulan
感谢提问。在数码构图时没有刻意采入南京名胜景点如夫子庙等。
杜鹃盛开
如期读到秋兰好诗,跟着你们慢慢学习古诗之韵 ,谢谢分享:)
小花荣
秋兰行的,下笔有神。
r
renqiulan
杜鹃太谦了,祝新周愉快!
r
renqiulan
小花荣太“果浆”了,问好!
l
lovecat08
豪!壮!悲!叹!
老梅林
坦然面对艰苦贫乏的生活,比死亡更难。
r
renqiulan
感谢爱猫留评鼓励。
r
renqiulan
感谢耳机点赞!
r
renqiulan
感谢老梅林点赞!
r
renqiulan
感谢心雨烟尘点赞!
r
renqiulan
感谢远风点赞!
r
renqiulan
感谢攸墨尔点赞!
r
renqiulan
感谢老梅林留评。如果“艰苦贫乏”指的是陶潜,恕我不敢苟同。
老梅林
谢秋兰回复!陶潜有以前的五斗米垫底,又有自家园地,当然不贫困。我是说贫民草芥的生活态度比隐士们坦然得多。