On that smothering summer day in Alabama, I breathed as I were in Shangri-La. You left me behind for a weeklong tour, to that lost mountain paradise. I greeted your return as I endure, all my fervor in disguise. But my eyes speak love! But my eyes plead love! Oh my Shangri-La, still dwells in Alabama.
On that smothering summer day in Alabama, I breathed as I were in Shangri-La. I was blinded by your skin, fair and milky. I was numbed by your chin, velvety and silky. But my heart sees love! But my heart feels love! Oh my Shangri-La, still dwells in Alabama.
-Wonderful poem. Perhaps one of the best I ever read here. So much emotion and depth, and it reads so well. Thank you for sharing.
受宠若惊， 不过真丢人， 俺不懂诗里的depth是啥。
When time bypasses
Rain falls, day by day. River flows, night by night. Meteors born and burn in Milky Way. Dawn meets dusk in dwindling twilight. My hairs fade, grey and gray. But Time carries on, light and bright. But time kindly bypassed that day- I fell for you at first sight.
- Your style is engaging. Repetition of words gave emphasis and imagery. This poem is short but it is meaningful.
真的 engage 了?
Cross
I see sins, I see virtues, they are closer than they seem. I carry virtues, I carry sins, are they meant to redeem?
Clever work and detailed at best. Strong line length. Keep writing!
又没懂， 这么短， 有 detail？ line length？
Me
The world is a bowl of chilled soup. I am a stainless fork. Life is a car climbing the steep hill. Am I a roaring force of torque? Love is a standing bottle of vintage wine. I am a oak cork. Death is blind to the humble and royal. Am I a white rose of York?
- It has a settled artistry approach, lots of fantastic word play!
美国文艺青年评诗
from allpoetry.com
当然一般是礼貌性的， 不过还是有些有意思的， 评的都是我写的， 贴的。
Oh my Shangri-La
On that smothering summer day in Alabama,
I breathed as I were in Shangri-La.
You left me behind for a weeklong tour,
to that lost mountain paradise.
I greeted your return as I endure,
all my fervor in disguise.
But my eyes speak love!
But my eyes plead love!
Oh my Shangri-La,
still dwells in Alabama.
On that smothering summer day in Alabama,
I breathed as I were in Shangri-La.
I was blinded by your skin,
fair and milky.
I was numbed by your chin,
velvety and silky.
But my heart sees love!
But my heart feels love!
Oh my Shangri-La,
still dwells in Alabama.
-Wonderful poem. Perhaps one of the best I ever read here. So much emotion
and depth, and it reads so well. Thank you for sharing.
受宠若惊， 不过真丢人， 俺不懂诗里的depth是啥。
When time bypasses
Rain falls, day by day.
River flows, night by night.
Meteors born and burn in Milky Way.
Dawn meets dusk in dwindling twilight.
My hairs fade, grey and gray.
But Time carries on, light and bright.
But time kindly bypassed that day-
I fell for you at first sight.
- Your style is engaging. Repetition of words gave emphasis and imagery.
This poem is short but it is meaningful.
真的 engage 了?
Cross
I see sins,
I see virtues,
they are closer than they seem.
I carry virtues,
I carry sins,
are they meant to redeem?
Clever work and detailed at best. Strong line length. Keep writing!
又没懂， 这么短， 有 detail？ line length？
Me
The world is a bowl of chilled soup.
I am a stainless fork.
Life is a car climbing the steep hill.
Am I a roaring force of torque?
Love is a standing bottle of vintage wine.
I am a oak cork.
Death is blind to the humble and royal.
Am I a white rose of York?
- It has a settled artistry approach, lots of fantastic word play!
Nicely penned
又没懂，啥是settled artistry approach？ 感觉挺高大上的。
短的那首，短得就像一个细节，所以有detail。。。
以上都是我胡扯。settled artistry approach是说你技巧娴熟。这一点我是同意的。。
有没有谁是H1b自己办绿卡成功的呢？我需要做labor certificate，那个kit里面的信息表格都挺全的。我听说办绿卡不一定要请律师，也不知道这种说法对H1b身份需要做labor certificate的人来说是否对。员绝对是可以自己办的。朋友们能不能把经验建议分享一下？
mark!!!!有深度mark!!mark!! mark!!!!短的那首mark!!mark!! mark!!!!技巧娴熟mark!!mark!!
mark!!!!胡扯mark!!mark!!
！！！！
不会是你自己写的跟评吧
!!!
subtle artistic approach
mark：1.） 名词。常用于感叹语，用于标记任何可引起情色暧昧歧义联想的纯洁词语或无辜表述。mark凸显的是词语的第二度，也就是歧义，不适用于本意就是情色的词语或表述，也不适用于不可产生情色歧义的词语或表述。歧义可以是有意设计，也可以是无心产生。原表述的作者在被mark之前，未必意识到歧义，被mark后也未必能醒悟歧义。
错误用例1. -"你来多伦多，我请你吃饭！”-“mark！你说话可得算数啊！”
错误用例2.-"LT贴片片的那个姑娘屁股真大！”-“mark！mark！”
正确用例：-“日复一日，精益求精。”-“mark！mark！”
2.）直接及物动词。直接宾语可以是1)中提到的歧义词语的具体表述。例：“这句话太值得mark了。”，也可以是表述者。例：“你小心舞妹mark你。”
3.) 不及物动词。例：“小舞怎么还不来mark？”