面试时这样说合适吗?

雪儿豆王
楼主 (文学城)

After I scheduled our interview, I received a verbal offer for another job I applied. They are working on my background check. The reason I still chose to come for the interview is that this job is my dream job and I don't want to miss the opportunity in your office before I make the final decision. I will go with this job if I become the finalist.

My biggest concern is that I might not have enough time to know your final decision before I need to sign that job offer letter. I don't want to hurt that hiring manager's feeling and cause any damage in terms of wasting their time and money if I decline that job offer after I accepted it. They might need to re-post the position and start the hiring process over again. If I couldn't hear from you before that job offer acceptance deadline, I will go with that job just simply because I respect their time and effort spent on hiring me.

so I would like to know when you can get back with me with your final decision.

 

谢谢

美国老土
找工作是一个 Business Process, 要用business的 方法和态度来对待。
雪儿豆王
谢谢老土老师这么快的答复。职场菜鸟,不懂就问?不是太明白老师的意思?
废话多多
说的太多了。(我觉得这些话应该由我来说 :))

I'd like to know when you'll make the final decision.  I have some other leads, but this position is my first choice.

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TigerLady
本末倒置的写法。先强调你喜欢这个工作,这个team..你有信心做贡献

再问一下什么时候有回音,因为你已经有个offer.

我是hiring manager, 这封信是减分。

雪儿豆王
谢谢多多老师。您句句都是职场箴言。我的毛病就是啰嗦 -:)
雪儿豆王
谢谢中肯的建议!!!
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Youth
太啰嗦了反而让人觉得你太soft. 不需要告诉人家细节. 可以讲你多喜欢

这家公司,有多么适合你. 然后说你想要他们早点答复因为你现在比较抢手.

雪儿豆王
好的。谢谢!
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Shanghaigirl98
没必要写那么多你的concern, 你的这种concern 人家看得多了。 说你喜欢这份工作的同时直接跟面试的人

要个最后期限, 别磨叽误了现在的offer. 

 

雪儿豆王
谢谢。
废话多多
老师不敢当,称我多多即可,废话也行。
一天到晚想吃鱼
赞!
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wawa123
good point. yj言简意赅