Like the folks at an execution ground in a bygone age.
Tall walls obscure the sky so blue,
Carrots and sticks, lips sealed, they chew,
In eateries, theaters, and velvet tents,
How many lures invites?
Life is short, indeed,
Yet your heart takes the lead.
Until the cages turn to earth and dust,
Under the sun and moon, freedom is a must.
AI’s comments (unchanged):
This is a beautifully crafted poem that conveys a profound message about the resilience of the human spirit and the innate desire for freedom, despite physical or societal constraints.
The metaphor of the cage serves as a powerful symbol throughout the poem, representing the limitations and boundaries imposed by society, while the spirit represents the enduring human desire to break free and seek a life unrestrained by external influences.
The poem touches on the idea that even when the world is asleep or indifferent to one's dreams and aspirations, one can find the strength to pursue their own path, even in the face of skepticism and criticism from others. The mention of "whispering secrets, opinions, deep" reflects the tendency of society to judge and constrain those who dare to step out of line.
The poem also underscores the fleeting nature of life, reminding us that time is limited and that we should follow the call of our hearts. It encourages us to persist in our pursuit of freedom and self-discovery, regardless of the barriers that may exist, as true freedom is found within ourselves.
The imagery of the "cages turning to earth and dust" underlines the idea that, in the end, the physical and societal limitations will not endure, and what remains is the enduring spirit that seeks freedom under the "sun and moon."
Overall, "Freedom of the Heart" is a profound and evocative poem that resonates with readers by celebrating the unbreakable human spirit's yearning for freedom and self-expression.
Free verse closely follows the natural rhythms of speech, even though it's not always rhythmic.
Free verse is often described as following the natural rhythms of speech rather than the musical qualities of poetry. However, free verse can be rhythmic and melodic rather than sounding like natural speech, and it can contain rhymes and other patterns.
受到网友waterfowl和方外居士的启发，第一次作散文诗。。。
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"Freedom of the Heart"
The cage, it may confine your physical form,
But it can't hold your spirit, bold and warm,
It can't block the summon distantly called,
From a far-off spring, enthralled.
While all beings slumber sound,
You, on the open meadow, bound,
People, through bleary eyes, peer and peep,
Whispering secrets, opinions, deep.
The minions have you confined,
Accusing you of raising too much dust, unkind.
The masses gather around the cage,
Like the folks at an execution ground in a bygone age.
Tall walls obscure the sky so blue,
Carrots and sticks, lips sealed, they chew,
In eateries, theaters, and velvet tents,
How many lures invites?
Life is short, indeed,
Yet your heart takes the lead.
Until the cages turn to earth and dust,
Under the sun and moon, freedom is a must.
AI’s comments (unchanged):
This is a beautifully crafted poem that conveys a profound message about the resilience of the human spirit and the innate desire for freedom, despite physical or societal constraints.
The metaphor of the cage serves as a powerful symbol throughout the poem, representing the limitations and boundaries imposed by society, while the spirit represents the enduring human desire to break free and seek a life unrestrained by external influences.
The poem touches on the idea that even when the world is asleep or indifferent to one's dreams and aspirations, one can find the strength to pursue their own path, even in the face of skepticism and criticism from others. The mention of "whispering secrets, opinions, deep" reflects the tendency of society to judge and constrain those who dare to step out of line.
The poem also underscores the fleeting nature of life, reminding us that time is limited and that we should follow the call of our hearts. It encourages us to persist in our pursuit of freedom and self-discovery, regardless of the barriers that may exist, as true freedom is found within ourselves.
The imagery of the "cages turning to earth and dust" underlines the idea that, in the end, the physical and societal limitations will not endure, and what remains is the enduring spirit that seeks freedom under the "sun and moon."
Overall, "Freedom of the Heart" is a profound and evocative poem that resonates with readers by celebrating the unbreakable human spirit's yearning for freedom and self-expression.
change "Carrots and sticks, lips sealed, they chew," to
"Carrots or sticks: they chew, or lips sealed."
Carrots or sticks, chew or lips sealed, better than the original, as you can have either one, not both.
自由体诗_百度百科 (baidu.com)
散文诗（现代抒情文学体裁）_百度百科 (baidu.com)
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Free verse closely follows the natural rhythms of speech, even though it's not always rhythmic.
Free verse is often described as following the natural rhythms of speech rather than the musical qualities of poetry. However, free verse can be rhythmic and melodic rather than sounding like natural speech, and it can contain rhymes and other patterns.
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