《Hot Sun, Burn Me into Ashes Please》《烈日,请把我烧成灰烬》

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CBA7
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《Hot Sun, Burn Me into Ashes Please》

Hot sun, burn me into ashes please
Ashes with free spirits
going up
up
up
Riding with the white clouds in the blue sky
Above the world

Author notes: 
The lines came to my mind when I walked alone in the soccer field near my home. The hot sun, white clouds, and blue sky seemed so surreal to me, and I felt that I would love to join them.

A comment from Allpoetry:
kaye - A great vision of thought. The feeling to this is a signature of art in letting your craft guide the ink.
Congratulations on fpp.

《烈日,请把我烧成灰烬》
烈日,请把我烧成灰烬
富含自由精神的灰烬
直上云霄
与蓝天里的白云同行
游离于这个世界之上

P. S. 这首诗的英文版 "Hot Sun, Burn Me into Ashes Please" 于2023年10月3日被选上了Allpoetry的首页(Front page picks, FPP)。

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盈盈一笑间
沙发。哇,被选上了英文诗歌网站Allpoetry的首页!Awesome !
盈盈一笑间
Ashes with free spirits,富含自由精神的灰烬 直上云霄,喜欢这一句。欣赏,学习!
方外居士
Above the world! What a free spirit!
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CBA7
谢谢盈盈的鼓励。看来,烧成灰之后更容易引起注意 :)
盈盈一笑间
哈哈,小西幽默。有文字功底的灰,才会引注意呀。否则也是白烧了。LOL
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CBA7
我也很喜欢这一句 :)这句和末句(Above the world)是这首诗的核心,也就是我们所说的“诗魂”。
盈盈一笑间
诗歌短小精悍,耐人寻味。谢谢诗人分享。晚安小西,晚安美坛 ~ ~·
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CBA7
WOW, you got the soul of this poem! 谢谢方君入木三分的点评。
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CBA7
谢谢盈盈的点评,盈盈辛苦了,晚安 ~ ~ ~
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CBA7
哈哈哈,其实很简单。只需要在烈日下,在光天化日之下,光明正大地烧成灰就不会白烧 :)
颤音
free ashes! 赞!
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CBA7
谢颤音。刚才看见了你的Blue Ashes,想起了这首诗。去年在书坛发过,当时只有英文版,后来在我的博客里加上了中文版。
移花接木
富有想象力,小西是文科僧? 要是我顶多想象到 bake me 2 jerky
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renqiulan
Poetry is where imagination takes off and flies---like ash.
盈盈一笑间
秋兰好,You're a poet better than most of poets :) - CBA7 -
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renqiulan
Perhaps, poetry is ash, and vice versa. Hi, 小西!
盈盈一笑间
噗~ 你们商学院怎么算?一半文科,一半理科吗?:)
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renqiulan
∞...an infinitive NAW!
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renqiulan
Hi, 盈盈!
盈盈一笑间
谦虚使人发月半。这句能看懂吗?哈哈
盈盈一笑间
Morning 秋兰 ~~
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renqiulan
Irish people talk about ash trees with relish,but I digress.
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CBA7
哈哈哈,移哥过奖了,也误判了。我是理科生,不过,从小学到高中我都是班上的语文课代表 :)
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renqiulan
Don't worry. Humble pies keep me fit. Haha!
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CBA7
哈哈哈,谦虚使人发胖,秋兰可要小心啊!
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CBA7
Great imagination. Your creative line is a good example :)
盈盈一笑间
你怎么啥都懂?真可怕!哈哈。
盈盈一笑间
哈哈哈
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CBA7
Hi, 秋兰!Thank you sharing your thoughts,
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CBA7
like fresh air in the morning.
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Oona
super!
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CBA7
Thank you, Oona!
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godog
Few words but saying a lot. Really liked it!
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CBA7
Thank you. I'm glad you liked it.
暖冬cool夏
小西好诗啊!首先是想象力,想象自己被太阳烧成灰烬,自由升空,俯瞰芸芸众生,其次语言精炼,格式自由,一气呵成,非常赞!
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7grizzly
Please don't, not when I'm alive :-)
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CBA7
谢谢冬夏的点评和鼓励。
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CBA7
Hahaha, OK, I promise you :)