You ask me again: “Why”, putting your tiny hand on the not yet unsheathed bud on the rhododendron.
你一面把小手放在还紧闭着的杜鹃花苞上,一面再次问我:“为什么?”
And I see I need to be sky; I need to be soil. There are no words for why that I can find fast enough.
我明白,非得知天知地才回答得出,我搜肠刮肚一下子也回答不了那么多为什么。
“Why", you say at the foot of the cherry's wide blossomfall. “Is it dead now? Why did it let go?”
“为什么?”你对着樱桃树下的遍地落花说,“这树已经死了吗? 为什么花都不要了啊?”
“Why” tossed out into what appears to be silence.
连串的为什么问了出来,回应似乎只有沉默。
When I say let's run, the rain is starting, "Why are we lost? Why did we just leave where we just were? Why is everything so far behind now as we go on?”
我说“咱们快跑”的时候,雨都已经下起来了。
“我们为什么迷路了?”
“我们为什么要离开我们刚才在的那个地方?”
“为什么我们越往前走,一切就都落在后面越远?”
I see you think when you reach me again to ask why, when I say, “Are you coming now”, & you say, “No, I want to stay, I want things to stay, I do not want to come away from things.”
What is this we are entering? Me taking yr hand now to speed our going as fast as we can in this suddenly hard rain, yr hand not letting go of the rose pebble u found.
By allowing a thought to overflow across lines, enjambment creates fluidity and brings a prose-like quality to poetry, Poets use literary devices like enjambment to: Add complexity. Enjambment builds a more complex narrative within a poem by fleshing out a thought instead of confining it to one line.
怎样读有跨行句的诗:
Enjambment has the effect of encouraging the reader to continue reading from one line to the next, since most of the time a line of poetry that's enjambed won't make complete sense until the reader finishes the clause or sentence on the following line or lines.
乔莉.格雷厄姆的这首《为什么》用了跨行(enjambment), 而不是结句行(end-stopped), 即诗行不对应语法的句子,所以我就意译了。 这里只是把这首诗按自己的理解断句翻译,难免有误,目的也只限于方便大家讨论:
You ask me again: “Why”, putting your tiny hand on the not yet unsheathed bud on the rhododendron.
你一面把小手放在还紧闭着的杜鹃花苞上,一面再次问我:“为什么?”
And I see I need to be sky; I need to be soil. There are no words for why that I can find fast enough.
我明白,非得知天知地才回答得出,我搜肠刮肚一下子也回答不了那么多为什么。
“Why", you say at the foot of the cherry's wide blossomfall. “Is it dead now? Why did it let go?”
“为什么?”你对着樱桃树下的遍地落花说,“这树已经死了吗? 为什么花都不要了啊?”
“Why” tossed out into what appears to be silence.
连串的为什么问了出来,回应似乎只有沉默。
When I say let's run, the rain is starting, "Why are we lost? Why did we just leave where we just were? Why is everything so far behind now as we go on?”
我说“咱们快跑”的时候,雨都已经下起来了。
“我们为什么迷路了?”
“我们为什么要离开我们刚才在的那个地方?”
“为什么我们越往前走,一切就都落在后面越远?”
I see you think when you reach me again to ask why, when I say, “Are you coming now”, & you say, “No, I want to stay, I want things to stay, I do not want to come away from things.”
我看到,当你又来到我身旁问为什么的时候,你在思考。我说,“你快跟上。” 你说,“不,我要待在这儿,我要所有一切都原地不动,我不想和它们分别。” 说这些时你都在思考。
What is this we are entering? Me taking yr hand now to speed our going as fast as we can in this suddenly hard rain, yr hand not letting go of the rose pebble u found.
我们这是进到哪里来啦? 雨突然下大了,为了加快速度,我便拉起你的手,你手里仍然攥着那块你找到的玫瑰色石子不放。
Feeling the first itching of personal luck as you now slowly pocket it, thinking you have taken with you a piece of what u could not leave behind.
你一面头一回体验个人运气带来的刺激,一面慢慢把石子放进口袋,觉得你这就是随身带走了自己不舍得离开的东西的一部分。
It is why we went there and left there.
这就是我们为什么去了那里又离开那里。
It is your why.
这就是对你的为什么的回答。
is really meant to be a househusband. :)
感觉就如你所说,那样断句就是造了个(没啥意义的)迷宫,她自己念的时候全按意思断句,对诗行根本不照顾。:)
我的翻译是严格地按照原作文字表面的意思进行的,并没有按自己的理解添加。唯一不同的是我在翻译中没有像作者那样使用跨行句。但是只因为这个不同,我就说这是“意译”,这其实是我用词不当。
跨行句的目的:
By allowing a thought to overflow across lines, enjambment creates fluidity and brings a prose-like quality to poetry, Poets use literary devices like enjambment to: Add complexity. Enjambment builds a more complex narrative within a poem by fleshing out a thought instead of confining it to one line.
怎样读有跨行句的诗:
Enjambment has the effect of encouraging the reader to continue reading from one line to the next, since most of the time a line of poetry that's enjambed won't make complete sense until the reader finishes the clause or sentence on the following line or lines.
从这些解释可以看出,跨行句的断句除了让文字在形式上显得像诗,一般并无其他意义。就拿这首《为什么》来说,作者本人在朗诵时,也完全不顾及自己在哪里断句,而是按照表意的自然句的划分朗读的。
换句话说,因为跨行句只是一个存粹的形式,在译作中用不用对意思并无影响,不用也不算意译。