Baby, are you ready Let's climb the mountains, While you stand by me. Baby, are you ready Let's touch the waves Let's go to see the sea Baby, I miss your smile Like whispering wind, you sent to me.
Baby, as we promised Don't be sad, don't hold your tears I know I am a fool But I know you are my world If you bled I bleed the same If you're scared I am on my way.
Baby, are you ready Let's walk in the clouds, Touching the dream Baby, are you ready Let me hold your hands Say I love you
先大大地点个赞！ 然后再“挑刺”。“挑刺”比原创容易多了，so here are 老汉's 2 cents:
老汉献丑出几个建议，供参考：
climb the mountains while you stand by me --- climb 给人以动感，stand 是静止不动，似乎有点儿矛盾。所以后半句或许可以改为 with you right beside me? 或节拍允许的话，side by side, you and me Touch the waves 似乎略微平淡了一些。Feel 或 hit 是否会更好一些？看具体想表现什么：feel 重在感受、情感，不过 hit the waves 更重在 adventure，似乎更能与 climb 对应。 See the seas 是否有点儿重音？既然上面已经要 climb the mountains, 接下来 travel the seas 可能动感更强、更有情人间“随我来吧，我们去看世界”的意思？
把人家的英文诗改得面目全非：)
Baby, are you ready
Let's climb the mountains,
While you stand by me.
Baby, are you ready
Let's touch the waves
Let's go to see the sea
Baby, I miss your smile
Like whispering wind, you sent to me.
Baby, as we promised
Don't be sad, don't hold your tears
I know I am a fool
But I know you are my world
If you bled
I bleed the same
If you're scared
I am on my way.
Baby, are you ready
Let's walk in the clouds,
Touching the dream
Baby, are you ready
Let me hold your hands
Say I love you
LinMu，不是Liumu，哈哈：）
老汉献丑出几个建议，供参考：
climb the mountains while you stand by me --- climb 给人以动感，stand 是静止不动，似乎有点儿矛盾。所以后半句或许可以改为 with you right beside me? 或节拍允许的话，side by side, you and me Touch the waves 似乎略微平淡了一些。Feel 或 hit 是否会更好一些？看具体想表现什么：feel 重在感受、情感，不过 hit the waves 更重在 adventure，似乎更能与 climb 对应。 See the seas 是否有点儿重音？既然上面已经要 climb the mountains, 接下来 travel the seas 可能动感更强、更有情人间“随我来吧，我们去看世界”的意思？想到这几个，先写这么多吧。