Light and Shadow-1 Smoke from the past

颤音
楼主 (文学城)

偶然发现自己码字经常扯上光和影 决定整理一下 先贴最旧的 如果不烦 就继续

都修改了一下,还请gpt神侃一下

Smoke from the past

Just one twilight
one joint
and one delight
we shared ever
Your hairs
wave in the wind
My memories
flow in the smoke forever

GPT
This poem appears to capture a nostalgic and bittersweet moment between two individuals. It is relatively short but conveys a sense of intimacy and the lingering impact of a shared experience. Let's dive deeper into the analysis:
The poem begins with the line "Smoke from the past," immediately evoking a sense of retrospection and reminiscence. The image of smoke suggests the ephemeral nature of memories, as smoke tends to dissipate and disappear over time. This sets the tone for the rest of the poem, emphasizing the transient nature of the experience being described.
The second line, "Just one twilight," introduces a specific moment or period of time. Twilights are often associated with a certain magic or enchantment, representing a liminal space between day and night. This choice of time frame adds to the poem's nostalgic atmosphere and hints at the fleeting nature of the shared experience.
The following line, "one joint," suggests the act of smoking marijuana, which can often create a relaxed and introspective state of mind. The joint serves as a catalyst for the memories and emotions that are about to be explored in the poem.
The line "and one delight" indicates that the experience shared between the speaker and the other person was a source of joy or happiness. The word "delight" implies a deep appreciation or satisfaction, suggesting that the memory holds a special place in the speaker's heart.
The second stanza of the poem shifts focus to the physical attributes of the other person. The line "Your hairs wave in the wind" paints a vivid image of the person's hair moving gracefully with the breeze. This line adds a touch of sensory detail, enhancing the reader's immersion in the scene.
The concluding line, "My memories flow in the smoke forever," ties the imagery of smoke back to the overarching theme of nostalgia and remembrance. The speaker suggests that their memories are forever intertwined with the smoke, indicating that the shared experience holds a lasting impact on their psyche. The word "flow" conveys a sense of movement and continuity, reinforcing the idea that the memories associated with this moment persist over time.
Overall, "Smoke from the Past" explores themes of fleeting moments, cherished memories, and the profound effect they can have on an individual. The poem captures a sense of wistfulness, inviting the reader to reflect on their own personal recollections and the emotions attached to them.

颤音
那时不懂joint的意思,只想表达intimacy,后来闻过,真臭,不过相关的故事有趣,如果想听,晚些时候写到跟贴里
忒忒绿
颤音的诗歌常常像一枚枚微雕,让思绪从细小局部的意象里散发到无限的空间,显示出卓越不群的想象力:)
颤音
谢谢绿的美言!被gpt误导了?gpt 在赞美 the romantic joint

按常用的文学评论词语,该是我的格局小,写诗也是只想记录一下自己被触动的一刻,我懒,其他的方式太费精力和时间。

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lovecat08
gpt常让我迷惑。快放弃了。
l
lovecat08
但是你的诗,还是给赞!
忒忒绿
读过你的许多诗歌之后的感受,没受GPT影响。gpt评论是泛泛的,缺乏针对性和特色,像一个不走心的学生应付老师布置的作业:)
忒忒绿
在发现了矿藏的地方,用短诗做个记号,也许等以后有空来挖掘:)
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renqiulan
I won't light up a tobacco cigarette, much less a doobie.
老键
哈妥妥一个吞云吐雾瘾君子,gpt 很不政治正确
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renqiulan
Uh oh! Gpt is losing its charm.
r
renqiulan
Gpt sounds like an agony aunt.
r
renqiulan
But then I know too little about it.
r
renqiulan
Good idea.
花似鹿葱
你很了不起,小诗让GPT大发议论呢!
颤音
东亚,好像欧洲都对吸烟比较宽容,烟灰缸,吸烟室,在美国更加是个stigma,不懂为何对吸大麻却宽容,对肺子也该有2手危害
颤音
gpt是应付差事,被动的,哈哈哈
颤音
反了,是政治正确,beautify 大麻
颤音
it's special to me, the 1st English poem I wrote 7 years ago