essay prompt：The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?
There is a certain phrase I encountered as I grew up, it goes “A is for Average, B is for Bad, C is for Catastrophic, and D is for Disowned”, a phrase used often to describe the intense pressure that many students face be it from family or friends. This is a phrase that I greatly despise.
When I was younger, my mother and father would always compare me to my older brother and family friends. It was always, “Timmy’s mother told me her son got a 1570 on their SAT,” or “your brother when he was your age got all A’s, so why can’t you be more like him.” I would also be scolded whenever I came home with anything other than perfection. I wasn’t safe from this pressure even at school. The schools in my area are sort of famous for rigorous standards and peer pressure for high GPA.
At my school, there was constant discussion about test scores, each other’s SAT scores, and how many AP classes they’re taking. It was suffocating, and yet I still thought it was normal and even accepted it as a way of life. Every test, project, and homework was a matter of life or death, the difference between going to an Ivy League college and failing school, at least according to my parents.
I remembered one time losing sleep days before a test due to the test determining whether or not I would get an A in that class. I would end up severely sleep deprived the day of the test and not do well, resulting in not getting that A. I remember planning which assignments I had to get an A on in order to maintain my grades. I also remember having to forgo many extra curricular activities in order to study and take private lessons. By the time I realized I was unnecessarily comparing myself to others and looking down on myself, I had already bought into the sick idea that grades determined one’s worth.
When I stopped needlessly chasing after the goals of others, it was as if a heavy weight had been lifted from my shoulders. I no longer compared myself to people I was not. Now that test scores and AP classes of others no longer mattered, the only person I needed to worry about was myself.
I now have a much more balanced life, no longer chasing the shadows of my brother and friends and looking down on myself. Grades and test scores no longer mattered and I was more free than ever before. I developed many hobbies over these past few years in computers, programming, and 3D design. My grades have also improved in several classes due to less stress and more sleep. Paradoxically, worrying less about my worth has improved it drastically.
In the end, test scores and grades do not measure your worth and should not be the end all be all. What matters most is that you tried your best and put in your best effort. A is not for Average, B is not for Bad, C is not for Catastrophic, and D is not for Disowned, a grade is just a grade, it measures neither your future success nor your self worth. Comparing yourself to others does nothing but give pressure and self loathing. The only metric you can compete against is yourself.
学校后一半的学生，属于后进向上型的，希望博得AO一点同情，不知道录取中有没有起到帮助作用。 他英文一般，自己写的基本没找人修改。（其实我们没有push他学习）
essay prompt：The lessons we take from obstacles we encounter can be fundamental to later success. Recount a time when you faced a challenge, setback, or failure. How did it affect you, and what did you learn from the experience?
There is a certain phrase I encountered as I grew up, it goes “A is for Average, B is for Bad, C is for Catastrophic, and D is for Disowned”, a phrase used often to describe the intense pressure that many students face be it from family or friends. This is a phrase that I greatly despise.
When I was younger, my mother and father would always compare me to my older brother and family friends. It was always, “Timmy’s mother told me her son got a 1570 on their SAT,” or “your brother when he was your age got all A’s, so why can’t you be more like him.” I would also be scolded whenever I came home with anything other than perfection. I wasn’t safe from this pressure even at school. The schools in my area are sort of famous for rigorous standards and peer pressure for high GPA.
At my school, there was constant discussion about test scores, each other’s SAT scores, and how many AP classes they’re taking. It was suffocating, and yet I still thought it was normal and even accepted it as a way of life. Every test, project, and homework was a matter of life or death, the difference between going to an Ivy League college and failing school, at least according to my parents.
I remembered one time losing sleep days before a test due to the test determining whether or not I would get an A in that class. I would end up severely sleep deprived the day of the test and not do well, resulting in not getting that A. I remember planning which assignments I had to get an A on in order to maintain my grades. I also remember having to forgo many extra curricular activities in order to study and take private lessons. By the time I realized I was unnecessarily comparing myself to others and looking down on myself, I had already bought into the sick idea that grades determined one’s worth.
When I stopped needlessly chasing after the goals of others, it was as if a heavy weight had been lifted from my shoulders. I no longer compared myself to people I was not. Now that test scores and AP classes of others no longer mattered, the only person I needed to worry about was myself.
I now have a much more balanced life, no longer chasing the shadows of my brother and friends and looking down on myself. Grades and test scores no longer mattered and I was more free than ever before. I developed many hobbies over these past few years in computers, programming, and 3D design. My grades have also improved in several classes due to less stress and more sleep. Paradoxically, worrying less about my worth has improved it drastically.
In the end, test scores and grades do not measure your worth and should not be the end all be all. What matters most is that you tried your best and put in your best effort. A is not for Average, B is not for Bad, C is not for Catastrophic, and D is not for Disowned, a grade is just a grade, it measures neither your future success nor your self worth. Comparing yourself to others does nothing but give pressure and self loathing. The only metric you can compete against is yourself.
只是写essay需要被同情
他从来没有真失眠过
毕竟是学校落后学生
When I stopped needlessly chasing after the goals of others
没说为什么stopped．．．
只说了突然就stopped....让读者迷惑
发生什么了你突然停止了？
这是一个逻辑断层
我也没仔细看他写的
写作都是散文，行散神不散的，故意控诉的
上次朋友跟我说高中生没空谈朋友，因为只在乎各种考试成绩。
或者自己放下包袱，反而跟从内心，自学了什么网上的科目？
见主贴
应该加点自己做了不少成绩单上没有展现的东西
好像这样写了不比老大效果差
老大学习好很多，GPA高但不ｐｅｒｆｅｃｔ对于ＡＯ未必喜欢这种类型。
ＡＯ视乎有任务挑一些差生的
A不是稳拿的。进H的都有过B。我不知道谁真的4.0
小时候说得多一点，上高中后拿一把Ｂ，父母和娃免疫了就不说了。
我们歌喉高中拿一个B就丢出２０％以外，早点跳出来自然轻松了。
修了三门。
虽然差不多了，但再等等。
Timmy妈妈说.....，你哥哥.......。吐槽实在太真实了！
我开始还不大明白disowned啥意思。娃大笑，说就是不要这个孩子的意思。
也许AO也这么认为， 觉得100%是学生自己写的 应该是加分
可惜我没有早点让娃看看，或许启发一点他写essay更好一点
我从担心自己得失，小心翼翼去让所有人满意这个环境走出来，走向更有意义的目标，do something that matters, 让世界更美好。认识到自己的力量，即使没有4.0 也有能力去帮助许多人。
前三段精简，后面几句加一个具体事件。