Please allow me to indulge, to cry, to dig out my love at such a remote place， as if I dig out a vine of Tonkin Jasmine on a starry night， in front of an abyss.
I carry around clay to my chest. Once I meet you, the clay turns into porcelain. but no one tells me every road is clear.
I walk limplier than you, I break easier than you. As a vendor of moonlight and society I allow you, to mock me.
If we wake up one morning, we couldn’t find each other, only a breeze blows through. We have to smile, no matter we forget or remember.
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Skypoet40 - thank you for sharing your emotional journey. love can hurt and it can be grand but in the end it is amazing2 years ago
很同意小谢，俺赶脚翻译不该是用另一个语言写出译者对诗歌的解读，诗歌通常是一百个人一百个解读，谁对谁错吗，没有答案，通常写诗的人有意模糊，留给读者解读思考的空间。所以俺赶脚翻译诗歌，该尽量 literal ，尽量不改变诗的结构，语序，译者把自己的解读强加给读者是不恰当的。比方，江雪，独钓寒江雪，俺赶脚是全诗的精华，前面都是铺垫，严格字面的意思俺以为是一个画面，老翁在独自一人在钓寒江上的雪，而非在钓鱼。小谢的翻译传递了这个画面。这个画面的意思自然是大家的解读会有种种。
比方这首诗，这句土到瓷，解读是啥？
读一首余秀华的《微风从我这里经过》
允许我沉醉，允许我哭泣，允许我在这么远的地方 把爱情掏出来。如掏一丛夜来香 面临星光的时候，面临深渊 我一直是个怀揣泥土的人，遇见你 它就有了瓷的模样 却没有人来告诉我每一条路都是晴朗 比你易跌倒，比你易破碎 作为一个贩卖月光和人间的人 我允许你，笑话我 如果哪一个早晨醒来，找不到彼此 只有微风吹过 一定要微笑，无论记得还是遗忘
my unsuccessful attempt
A breeze bypasses me
Please allow me to indulge, to cry, to dig out my love
at such a remote place， as if I dig out a vine of Tonkin Jasmine
on a starry night， in front of an abyss.
I carry around clay to my chest. Once I meet you,
the clay turns into porcelain.
but no one tells me every road is clear.
I walk limplier than you, I break easier than you.
As a vendor of moonlight and society
I allow you, to mock me.
If we wake up one morning, we couldn’t find each other,
only a breeze blows through.
We have to smile, no matter we forget or remember.
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Skypoet40 - thank you for sharing your emotional journey. love can hurt and it can be grand but in the end it is amazing2 years ago
这种心情下他是不会想象自己钓雪的，让人觉得silly，活该。他欲表达的，除了一些孤独，就是万马齐喑，唯有他一人还在大无畏做些有意义的事，不过既然文字上钓鱼钓雪不明确，翻译时也可回避鱼字，所以我翻译中用了angling。