在此世界政局巨变之际,我们两口子今天关于英文表达的发生一点小争议,来华人上来劳烦大家求证一下。事情是这样的,最近我们买了房,要退出租房合同,我给房东发了一封信,抄送领导,领导说我的语气condescending,我感觉简直难以理解。你们觉得呢? 邮件原件如下: Hi landlord-name, We have bought a house in xyz, and plan to move out by the end of August. Thanks for having us for the past 2 yrs and please plan accordingly. Best, my name. -- update - 目前是month to month lease 感谢各位的反馈:-)
在此世界政局巨变之际,我们两口子今天关于英文表达的发生一点小争议,来华人上来劳烦大家求证一下。事情是这样的,最近我们买了房,要退出租房合同,我给房东发了一封信,抄送领导,领导说我的语气condescending,我感觉简直难以理解。你们觉得呢? 邮件原件如下: Hi landlord-name, We have bought a house in xyz, and plan to move out by the end of August. Thanks for having us for the past 2 yrs and please plan accordingly. Best, my name. peteron 发表于 2020-07-27 02:17
我可能会这么写 Dear xxx, I'm writing to let you know that blah blah, we plan to do blah blah, would this work with you? please let us know. Thank you! Heiniu 发表于 2020-07-27 02:36
房东没啥可plan accordingly的,你该把日子写清楚8/31就是8/31,the end of August谁知道是具体哪天,接下来要双方walk through,有修缮的要修缮,你的deposit全额要不要得回来,应该是你最后把房子还原plan accordingly by walk-through date,. 嘴甜措辞客气的人,其实也是会站在对方角度思考问题的人,现实生活中不吃闷亏
我可能会这么写 Dear xxx, I'm writing to let you know that blah blah, we plan to do blah blah, would this work with you? please let us know. Thank you! Heiniu 发表于 2020-07-27 02:36
我更喜欢楼主的信,简单清晰。什么叫will this work for u? 她们已经month to month 租了,不work又怎样?你的信多生枝节。
邮件原件如下: Hi landlord-name, We have bought a house in xyz, and plan to move out by the end of August. Thanks for having us for the past 2 yrs and please plan accordingly. Best, my name.
-- update - 目前是month to month lease 感谢各位的反馈:-)
不太好。
please plan accordlingly像对下属布置任务,还不是那种nice的领导。
Dear xxx,
I'm writing to let you know that blah blah, we plan to do blah blah, would this work with you? please let us know. Thank you!
是有点生硬,敏感一些的或是不体谅你英语非母语的人会觉得别扭。开头可以打个招呼, hope this email finds you well之类的;最后一句话从祈使句改成could you...。
也不咋地,都是中式英语。通知不是商量。房东说不work你们得再住一年
rude. 就算你痛恨房东,也没必要把自己划分到rude群里
我更喜欢楼主的信,简单清晰。什么叫will this work for u? 她们已经month to month 租了,不work又怎样?你的信多生枝节。
这个好。公文务必清楚无争议,不用啰嗦。
我觉得层主写的挺好的,一般这么写也就是客气客气。嫌太客气的话就把最后一句改成 Let me know if you have any issues.