大家再尝试阅读下，有什么新感受没有？不管是从行文还是故事内容的角度。

A doctor was going home after work was done.In the elevator he saw a charming nurse and pressed the light of ground floor on.Weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3.The door opens,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button,then the elevator moves on.
　　''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
　　''Oh my god,She had tab on her wrist!''Answered the docter in horror.
　　''What's wrong with it?''With more ___on the nurse's face.
　　''There has a morgue in the basement and the dead bodies in it are marked with our hospital's tabs tying to their right wrist!Didn't you know that?''
　　''Oh please~,calm down that's not a big deal,i have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised the wrist to the docter and with a 玩味的笑 on her face.
　　''OH FUCK!''The docter 眼里闪过一道寒光.

docter……看上去哪里有些不对

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我写忘记了，谢谢指出。

刚才我又发现问题了，这篇文章后半部分由于我的疏忽引起整个对话的不合理最终导致我原本要讲的故事都扭曲变形了，而我之前一直以我原本的故事印象来看这文章的，感觉很不错，是个得意之作，所以难以理解大家的反应平平，甚至不以为然。我在楼下贴上我修改后的故事，有两个版本，我更喜欢第一个版本，大家也说说你们喜欢哪个，谢谢了！

版本一： 　　A doctor was going home after work was done.In the elevator he saw a charming nurse and pressed the light of ground floor on.Weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3.The door opens,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button,then the elevator moves on.
　　''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
　　''Oh my god,She had the morgue's dead body identification tag on her wrist!''Answered the doctor in horror.
　　''What's wrong with that?''With more ___on the nurse's face.
　　''What do you mean what's wrong with that?She is a freaking dead body!''
　　''Oh please~,why are you being so stimulated？I have it too.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised the wrist to the doctor and with a玩味的笑on her face.
　　''OH FUCK!''The doctor眼里闪过一道寒光.

版本二： 　　　　A doctor was going home after work was done.In the elevator he saw a charming nurse and pressed the light of ground floor on.Weirdly the elevator didn't stop when it had reached the ground and kept moving down until to the B3.The door opens,a granny was standing there .The doctor rushed to press the door close button,then the elevator moves on.
　　''Why did you not let her in?'' The nurse asked with ___ on her face.
　　''Oh my god,She had the tag on her wrist!''Answered the doctor in horror.
　　''What tag?''With more ___on the nurse's face.
　　''The morgue's dead body identification tag!There has a morgue in basement!''
　　''you mean like this one.''The nurse pulled up her sleeve and raised the wrist to the doctor and with a 玩味的笑 on her face.
　　''OH FUCK!''The doctor 眼里闪过一道寒光.

好无聊啊，大家读读那个版本一。读了的都没话说吗？你们也够无聊的，我刚才读了三次笑了三次。