Dear Mom, 亲爱的妈妈, You had always been saying that the world outside home was a cruel, dangerous place. You were wrong. The world is sweet, filled with kind-hearted people who really love me. 您总是说外面的世界是个冷酷无情的危险的地方。你错了。世界很美好,到处都是充满了爱心的人们。他们可喜欢我了。
Have you ever heard about the song, “Shape of You” by Ed Sheeran? It was about me! I am a charming girl with long straight arms and legs. My body is lean and strong, with a flat belly that everybody dreams of. Who wouldn’t love a pretty spirit like me? My singing is even more attractive than my body. You used to think that Cicada and Cricket sang better than I did. However, you were incorrect again. Cicada only knew how to chirp on the tall oak trees, Cricket only felt comfortable to chant under the low liriope grasses. When I performed, I hummed next to a person's ear. The audience loved my show so much that they clapped for me even before the end of the song. 你听过Ed Sheeran唱的那首歌,《你的身材》么? 那说的就是我。我是一个充满魅力的女孩。我有又长又直的胳膊和腿,我的身体虽然瘦,但是很匀称。我的平坦的小腹人人都羡慕。谁会不喜欢我这么一个可爱的小精灵呢?我的歌声,比我的身材更加吸引人。你老说,连知了和蟋蟀都比我唱得好听。得了吧。知了演唱时离不开高高的橡树,蟋蟀只敢躲在低低的麦冬草下高歌。而我却是在人们的耳边吟唱。 观众太喜欢我的演出了,以至于他们总是在曲终之前就开始鼓掌了。 People fell in love with my singing and I even formed a band with a few of my friends. We practiced and performed in Dunn Loring Park shelter. During our show, people kept applauding for us, nonstop! The news of our band spread around rapidly. Our band was becoming more and more famous. When people came, they always wore formal long shirts, pants, and even special perfume to show their respect to us. The scent didn't smell good, but later on we started to like it. 人们太喜欢我的歌声了。我和我的朋友干脆组建了一个乐队。我们在邓恩劳恩公园的野餐棚里排练和表演。我们演出的时候观众的掌声络绎不绝。由于我们的乐队的名声远播,人们每次来参观的时候都会穿上正式的长衣长裤。为了表示对我们的尊敬,他们甚至会喷上香水!那个香味可不那么好闻,不过我们慢慢地也就喜欢上了。
Some members in my band graduated from famous colleges for boys [1]. Last year, 20 Million teenage boys graduated from these colleges. I don't have a boyfriend yet, but there are plenty of handsome boys to date with! Maybe I am going to marry one of them and make a dozen cute babies in the future. 我们乐队里面有些成员是从名牌男子大学毕业的。(注1) 去年, 两千万这样的小伙子从大学毕业走向社会。我现在虽然还没有男朋友,但是我周有好多帅气的小伙子可以约会!我想也许将来我会和他们其中的一个结婚,一口气生一打讨人喜欢的宝宝!
Nowadays the weather is getting cold. Kyler invited me to live in his house by leaving the front door wide open. Kyler is a juicy third grader from Westbriar Elementary School. People in Kyler's family smell so sweet. Kyler even has a tiny chubby baby brother, who is so soft, tender and adorable. I want to kiss him a thousand times each day and he always smiles back at me. 现在天气慢慢变凉了。凯凯把他家的前门大敞着邀请我去他家里做客。 凯凯是一个水灵灵(英文的原意是多汁)的小学三年级学生。他们家的每个人都洋溢着甜美的气息。凯凯甚至有一个肥嘟嘟的婴儿弟弟。那个弟弟真是又柔软,又粉嫩,太招人喜欢了。我愿意每天都亲他一千遍。 我每次亲他的时候,他都会笑嘻嘻地看着我。 Kyler was thrilled with excitement when he saw me kissing the baby's fat leg last time. He even told his parents about the good news. So Kyler and his mom set up a special lantern[2] in the baby's bedroom to keep me warm and healthy. They are so considerate. I wish I could fly high, high above the cloud to collect a drop of blood from an angel. Then I would transfer the golden blood to the baby so that he could live a healthy long life. This is the only way I can show my appreciation to Kyler’s family. 上次凯凯看见我亲弟弟的腿的时候,他尖叫着,激动得眼泪都流下来了。他把这个好消息都告诉了他的父母。凯凯和他的妈妈甚至在婴儿的房间架了一盏特殊的小灯,(注2)生怕我着凉了。他们太体贴我了!我希望我能飞越高高的云端, 从天使那里采集一滴珍贵的血液。然后把这滴金色的血液输送给这个宝宝, 这样他就能健康长寿了!这也是我唯一能对凯凯家表示感谢的方法吧! Mom, I have not seen you for a while and I really miss you. If you have time, please, please come to visit me. Kyler's family will always be nice to you. 妈妈,很久不见,我真的很想你。你有空的时候一定要来凯凯家看看我。他们家一定也会对你很好的!
Love, 爱你的, Mossy Kato 雯雯
[1] ToShrink Mosquito Population, Scientists Are Releasing 20 Million Mosquitoes,July 2017, NPR news It sounds counter intuitive. But the plan is to release millions of sterile male mosquitoes, which will then mate with wild female mosquitoes. The eggs the females lay won't hatch, researchers say. 注1 美国国家公共广播电台2017年报道,为减少蚊子的数量,科学家每年向野外放飞两千万只雄性蚊子。 这些雄性蚊子和雌性蚊子产的卵是无法孵化的。 [2] Mosquito Insect Killer Lamp - Portable Bug Zapper The Pests are attracted to LED lights of the bug zapper, and inhaled quickly into the storage tray by the airflow, then ferocious mosquitoes will be dried and dehydrated to death. Compared with the way that pets fly into the electrical grid slowly, it is more proactive and effective. 注2 好美家出售一种灭蚊灯。当蚊子被灯光吸引靠近灯的时候,会被气流吸入隔间脱水而死。据说这种方法比电网格杀虫更加有效。
First, let's talk about writing a 0 point article. It sounds easy but may take you a lot of guts to write. Trust me, I did that last year. 首先我们讲一讲怎么写一个零分的作文。 它听着很容易,可是你要很大胆子才敢写。 真的,我去年写过。 In one writing class, I wrote only one word on the whole sheet. As a consequence, Mrs. King asked Daddy and Mommy to come to school to talk with her. I was also sent to the principal's office at lunch time because I was allowed only to eat lunch by myself. At home, Daddy put my one-word-writing into a picture frame, which was originally used to hold my certificates of achievements. It was not a fun experience at all. So you don't need to be good at writing, you don't need to have any skills, all you need is courage! 有一次上写作课, 我在整张纸上只写了一个词。因为这个,老师让爸爸妈妈来学校和她开会。 吃午饭的时候, 我被送到校长办公室因为我不许和别的同学一起吃午饭。在家里爸爸把我的一个字的作文放到了镜框里面。原来那个镜框是用来装我的奖状的。那可不是一个好玩的事情。所以你不用写得很好,你只要有勇气就可以写零分作文!
Now let's move on to 1 point articles. Why do we need to write 1 point articles? This is because sometimes you may forget to do your homework. Other times you want finish the homework quickly and go out to play. Either way you don't want to submit a 0 point article. A 1 point article written within just a few minutes can solve this problem, without provoking your teachers or your parents. Now let me teach you the technique to write such an article. 接下来我们讲一讲刚及格的一分作文。我们为什么有时要写一篇刚及格的作文呢?有的时候我们会忘记做作业呀。或者你只想在外面玩,不想写字。但是你又不想交一个零分作文, 花几秒钟写一个刚及格的作文就可以过这一关, 又不会被老师或者爸爸妈妈罚作业。 现在让我教写这种作文的技巧。
The key to write a 1 point article is to answer the question. For example, if you are writing “My favorite sports”, you have to answer the question what your favorite sports is. If you are writing “My favorite teacher”, you need to answer who your favorite teacher is. However, just this one sentence will not get you off the hook. You also need to add a little bit connection to yourself so that you don't just write one dry sentence. I will write three stories, “My favorite teacher”, “My favoritesports”, and “My favorite season” to show you how to do that. 写一分作文的秘诀是回答题目的问题。比如你在《我最喜欢的运动》,你要回答你最喜欢的运动到底是什么。 如果你在写《我喜欢的老师》,那你非要回答你最喜欢的老师是谁。可是,仅仅一句话是不能解决问题的。你要联想一下自己,所以你不能只写一个干巴巴的句子。 我在这里给你写三个作文《我最喜欢的老师》,《我最喜欢的运动》和 《我最喜欢的季节》,给你看看应该怎么写才好。
My Favorite Teacher You favorite teacher may be a teacher who taught you a few years ago, but you can not actually finish an article about her within 5 minutes. I would suggest that you write about the teacher who is going to read this article and who is going to grade it. Once you have the teacher in your mind, you can write ike this: My favorite teacher is Ms. Gaver. She is a very nice teacher because even if I write such a short article, she is still going to say, “Good Job!” 我最喜欢的老师 你最喜欢的老师可能是几年前教过你的老师, 可是你很难在1分钟里面把他给写清楚。我建议你写会读你这个文章的老师。一旦你想清楚是哪个老师的时候,你可以这么写: 我最喜欢的老师是Gaver小姐. 她是一个很善良的老师,因为即使我写一个这么短的文章,她还是会说, “写得不错!”
My Favorite Sports Your favorite sports may be hockey, swimming, basketball, etc. But if you really like it, then you must have a lot of things to talk about: coaches, teammates, friends, training experience, tears and laughters in games --- so many things that you won't be able to organize in one minute. You really want to pick something so simple that you can finish with a few sentences. You can write something like this: It took me a really long time to think what sports that I had participated in, but I could not think of any. But each day I did walk to the bus stop in the morning and walk back from the bus stop in the afternoon. So my favorite sports is technically walking to and from the bus stop.
My Favorite Season I would suggest you to write about the season that is happening right now because you can get plenty of ideas by just looking outside the window. Looking outside the window, I see that summer is passing. My favorite season is about to end, and I am kept here writing the story. That's not fair. I want to go out to play in the last days of my favorite season.
The articles above may earn you 1 point, but there is still a risk that you can 0 point. To be safe, let me teach you another fun technique so that you can definitely get 1 point. This technique is called “Hidden Treasure”. We all know the concept called “Show, not tell”. You can define a keyword for your article but you must not say it out. Instead, use hints and details to present it to the reader. Let me rewrite the three stories above, with keywords hidden.
上面的作文可能会得到一个分,可是你还是有可能会得0分。为了保险起见,我再教你一个另外的有趣的技巧,你肯定能及格的。这个技巧叫做 “隐藏的财报”。 我们都知道这个 “Show, not tell”的概念。你可以给你的文章找一个关键词。可是你千万不能把它给写出来。你用细节和暗示把它的呈现给读者。让我用这个技巧这样重写上面三个作文。
My Favorite Teacher The hidden word I want to use for this article is Kindness Ms. Gaver always talks softly with a smile staining on her lips. She has this specially capability to find something good in her students even though they are doing a bad job. For example, even if I write such a short article about her, she is still going to be amused and say, “Well, it is still nice. I know that you were in a rush.” Because of this, she is my favorite teacher.
My Favorite Sports The hidden word I want to hide in this article is Laziness I laid in my couch, munching on a bag of barbeque flavored chip, while thinking about what sports that I had participated in. I finished the whole bag and I could not think of any. But each day I did walk to the bus stop in the morning and come back from in the afternoon. So my only sports was technically walking to and from the bus stop. Wait a minute, I didn't really enjoy going to the bus stop! I did like coming back from the bus stop, because I knew my soft, squishy, fluffy and soothing pillow would be waiting for me in my couch. So walking back from the bus stop was my favorite sports!
My Favorite Season I want to hide the secret keyword Sadness in the writing. The cicadas are no longer chirping outside the window. I noticed that on my calendar, the page for August should be turned over next Monday. My favorite season is about to finish, and I am kept here writing the story. That's not fair. I want to go out to enjoy the last a few good days of summer. I already started to miss the sunshine that seemed so annoying only a few weeks ago. Goodbye my trip to China, Goodbye my Hockey Science Camp, Goodbye, my summer vacation. See you next year.
My friends, would you like to share with me some of your 1 point articles? I'd like to publish some of them in my wechat posts. 朋友们,你们想不想和我分享你们写的刚及格的作文? 我想这里发表几篇你们写的文章。
I write in my bed, on the couch, on the floor and mostly on my desk. I write a lot, but that does not mean that I like writing. You may ask me, "Why do you write frequently if you don't like to?" Well, do you poop everyday? But do you like it? 我在我的床上写,在沙发上写,在地上写,我最多还是在我的书桌上写的。 我写这么多,可是那并不代表我喜欢习作。你可能会问我:“为什么不喜欢你还老写呢?” 嗯,你每天拉粑粑么?但是你喜欢拉么?
I write because I have to. I had to write my homework. I need write a birthday card to enter a birthday party. My daddy always "made" me write stories. Sometimes I had to write important messages to my friends, for which, I wrote in secret languages that I invented. 我写作是因为我非写不可。我必须做我的作文作业。我非要写一个生日卡才能去一个生日派对。 我的爸爸老是逼我写故事。 有的时候,我要给朋友写很重要的消息。当然我是用我自己发明的秘密的语言写这些消息的。
Similarly, I wait at the bus stop all the time, but that doesn't mean that I like waiting under the summer sun. What I like is to ride inside the bus with the AC belowing cool air into my face, the beautiful changing landscapes outside the window, watching the bus driver handling the bus, and finally the happniess of arriving at my destination. 类似的,我经常在汽车站等车。 可是那不说明我喜欢在夏天的太阳底下等公交。我喜欢的是车里凉快的空调, 窗外变化的景色,仔细观察司机是怎么开车的,以及到达目的地的幸福喜悦。
Writing itself is painful but I earn a lot of rewards in the end, like small paychecks and gifts from the publishers. My teachers will give me good scores on my homework. My daddy gives me 25 cents for every good essay I write, but I think 1 dollar should be more reasonable. 习作本身是很累的但是最后我能得到很多东西, 比如出版社会给一些礼物和小额支票。老师会给我的作业好的分数。 每当我写一个好作文,我爸爸也会给我25分钱,可是我觉得1块钱更加合理。
Even though there are rewards, I still do not like writing. However, by degrees, I am starting to enjoy the smoothness of my pencil rubbing against the paper, and the fluency of my story running down like a waterfall. I like to gaze outside the window, thinking about what my storyline is going to be like, meanwhile adding a whimsical sense of humor between the lines. 虽然有奖励,可是我还是不喜欢写作。尽管如此,我现在已经开始有点喜欢我的铅笔在纸上沙沙的感觉。我喜欢故事象瀑布下落那么流畅。当我想情节的时候,我喜欢看着窗外发呆的感觉。
As I fully understand the kind of ordeal that you have to go through in writing, I would like to write homework for you for only 1 dollar. In my published stories, if you want the protagonist to have your name, then you can pay me 5 dollars. If you want your appearance to be customizable in my story, then you need to pay me 10 dollars. If you want to have your own story lines and endings, then you have to pay me at least 50 dollars. 我知道写作是一件很痛苦的事情,所以如果你给我一美元的话,我愿意帮你写作业的。 在我发表的故事里, 如果你想要主角有的名字的话,你需要给我5美元。如果你想要的长相变成你想要的样子的话,那你必须给我10块钱。 如果你想有你自己的故事情节和结尾的话,那你至少要给我50美元。
But if you already have your characters, your own story lines, and endings, then you already have your own story. Why do you want to pay me? 如果你已经有了你自己的人物,情节和结尾, 那你已经有你自己的故事了。你何必给我钱呢?
希望和大家一起提高写作能力。
贴一个习作分享。 中文翻译是和大人一起做的。中文能力还不能使用这么多大词。英文是自己写的。
娃在4-5个儿童杂志上发表过作品了。
男孩,写的东西有的时候有点怪异,暗黑,比如下面这个看上去好温馨啊,实际上根本不是那么回事。
娃喜欢写悬疑,稍微有点恐怖和幽默的故事
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习作分享/A Letter to Mom/给妈妈的一封信
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Dear Mom, 亲爱的妈妈,
You had always been saying that the world outside home was a cruel, dangerous place. You were wrong. The world is sweet, filled with kind-hearted people who really love me. 您总是说外面的世界是个冷酷无情的危险的地方。你错了。世界很美好,到处都是充满了爱心的人们。他们可喜欢我了。
Have you ever heard about the song, “Shape of You” by Ed Sheeran? It was about me! I am a charming girl with long straight arms and legs. My body is lean and strong, with a flat belly that everybody dreams of. Who wouldn’t love a pretty spirit like me? My singing is even more attractive than my body. You used to think that Cicada and Cricket sang better than I did. However, you were incorrect again. Cicada only knew how to chirp on the tall oak trees, Cricket only felt comfortable to chant under the low liriope grasses. When I performed, I hummed next to a person's ear. The audience loved my show so much that they clapped for me even before the end of the song. 你听过Ed Sheeran唱的那首歌,《你的身材》么? 那说的就是我。我是一个充满魅力的女孩。我有又长又直的胳膊和腿,我的身体虽然瘦,但是很匀称。我的平坦的小腹人人都羡慕。谁会不喜欢我这么一个可爱的小精灵呢?我的歌声,比我的身材更加吸引人。你老说,连知了和蟋蟀都比我唱得好听。得了吧。知了演唱时离不开高高的橡树,蟋蟀只敢躲在低低的麦冬草下高歌。而我却是在人们的耳边吟唱。 观众太喜欢我的演出了,以至于他们总是在曲终之前就开始鼓掌了。
People fell in love with my singing and I even formed a band with a few of my friends. We practiced and performed in Dunn Loring Park shelter. During our show, people kept applauding for us, nonstop! The news of our band spread around rapidly. Our band was becoming more and more famous. When people came, they always wore formal long shirts, pants, and even special perfume to show their respect to us. The scent didn't smell good, but later on we started to like it. 人们太喜欢我的歌声了。我和我的朋友干脆组建了一个乐队。我们在邓恩劳恩公园的野餐棚里排练和表演。我们演出的时候观众的掌声络绎不绝。由于我们的乐队的名声远播,人们每次来参观的时候都会穿上正式的长衣长裤。为了表示对我们的尊敬,他们甚至会喷上香水!那个香味可不那么好闻,不过我们慢慢地也就喜欢上了。
Some members in my band graduated from famous colleges for boys [1]. Last year, 20 Million teenage boys graduated from these colleges. I don't have a boyfriend yet, but there are plenty of handsome boys to date with! Maybe I am going to marry one of them and make a dozen cute babies in the future. 我们乐队里面有些成员是从名牌男子大学毕业的。(注1) 去年, 两千万这样的小伙子从大学毕业走向社会。我现在虽然还没有男朋友,但是我周有好多帅气的小伙子可以约会!我想也许将来我会和他们其中的一个结婚,一口气生一打讨人喜欢的宝宝!
Nowadays the weather is getting cold. Kyler invited me to live in his house by leaving the front door wide open. Kyler is a juicy third grader from Westbriar Elementary School. People in Kyler's family smell so sweet. Kyler even has a tiny chubby baby brother, who is so soft, tender and adorable. I want to kiss him a thousand times each day and he always smiles back at me. 现在天气慢慢变凉了。凯凯把他家的前门大敞着邀请我去他家里做客。 凯凯是一个水灵灵(英文的原意是多汁)的小学三年级学生。他们家的每个人都洋溢着甜美的气息。凯凯甚至有一个肥嘟嘟的婴儿弟弟。那个弟弟真是又柔软,又粉嫩,太招人喜欢了。我愿意每天都亲他一千遍。 我每次亲他的时候,他都会笑嘻嘻地看着我。
Kyler was thrilled with excitement when he saw me kissing the baby's fat leg last time. He even told his parents about the good news. So Kyler and his mom set up a special lantern[2] in the baby's bedroom to keep me warm and healthy. They are so considerate. I wish I could fly high, high above the cloud to collect a drop of blood from an angel. Then I would transfer the golden blood to the baby so that he could live a healthy long life. This is the only way I can show my appreciation to Kyler’s family. 上次凯凯看见我亲弟弟的腿的时候,他尖叫着,激动得眼泪都流下来了。他把这个好消息都告诉了他的父母。凯凯和他的妈妈甚至在婴儿的房间架了一盏特殊的小灯,(注2)生怕我着凉了。他们太体贴我了!我希望我能飞越高高的云端, 从天使那里采集一滴珍贵的血液。然后把这滴金色的血液输送给这个宝宝, 这样他就能健康长寿了!这也是我唯一能对凯凯家表示感谢的方法吧!
Mom, I have not seen you for a while and I really miss you. If you have time, please, please come to visit me. Kyler's family will always be nice to you. 妈妈,很久不见,我真的很想你。你有空的时候一定要来凯凯家看看我。他们家一定也会对你很好的!
Love, 爱你的,
Mossy Kato 雯雯
[1] ToShrink Mosquito Population, Scientists Are Releasing 20 Million Mosquitoes,July 2017, NPR news It sounds counter intuitive. But the plan is to release millions of sterile male mosquitoes, which will then mate with wild female mosquitoes. The eggs the females lay won't hatch, researchers say.
注1 美国国家公共广播电台2017年报道,为减少蚊子的数量,科学家每年向野外放飞两千万只雄性蚊子。 这些雄性蚊子和雌性蚊子产的卵是无法孵化的。
[2] Mosquito Insect Killer Lamp - Portable Bug Zapper The Pests are attracted to LED lights of the bug zapper, and inhaled quickly into the storage tray by the airflow, then ferocious mosquitoes will be dried and dehydrated to death. Compared with the way that pets fly into the electrical grid slowly, it is more proactive and effective.
注2 好美家出售一种灭蚊灯。当蚊子被灯光吸引靠近灯的时候,会被气流吸入隔间脱水而死。据说这种方法比电网格杀虫更加有效。
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First, let's talk about writing a 0 point article. It sounds easy but may take you a lot of guts to write. Trust me, I did that last year.
首先我们讲一讲怎么写一个零分的作文。 它听着很容易,可是你要很大胆子才敢写。 真的,我去年写过。
In one writing class, I wrote only one word on the whole sheet. As a consequence, Mrs. King asked Daddy and Mommy to come to school to talk with her. I was also sent to the principal's office at lunch time because I was allowed only to eat lunch by myself. At home, Daddy put my one-word-writing into a picture frame, which was originally used to hold my certificates of achievements. It was not a fun experience at all. So you don't need to be good at writing, you don't need to have any skills, all you need is courage!
有一次上写作课, 我在整张纸上只写了一个词。因为这个,老师让爸爸妈妈来学校和她开会。 吃午饭的时候, 我被送到校长办公室因为我不许和别的同学一起吃午饭。在家里爸爸把我的一个字的作文放到了镜框里面。原来那个镜框是用来装我的奖状的。那可不是一个好玩的事情。所以你不用写得很好,你只要有勇气就可以写零分作文!
Now let's move on to 1 point articles. Why do we need to write 1 point articles? This is because sometimes you may forget to do your homework. Other times you want finish the homework quickly and go out to play. Either way you don't want to submit a 0 point article. A 1 point article written within just a few minutes can solve this problem, without provoking your teachers or your parents. Now let me teach you the technique to write such an article.
接下来我们讲一讲刚及格的一分作文。我们为什么有时要写一篇刚及格的作文呢?有的时候我们会忘记做作业呀。或者你只想在外面玩,不想写字。但是你又不想交一个零分作文, 花几秒钟写一个刚及格的作文就可以过这一关, 又不会被老师或者爸爸妈妈罚作业。 现在让我教写这种作文的技巧。
The key to write a 1 point article is to answer the question. For example, if you are writing “My favorite sports”, you have to answer the question what your favorite sports is. If you are writing “My favorite teacher”, you need to answer who your favorite teacher is. However, just this one sentence will not get you off the hook. You also need to add a little bit connection to yourself so that you don't just write one dry sentence. I will write three stories, “My favorite teacher”, “My favoritesports”, and “My favorite season” to show you how to do that.
写一分作文的秘诀是回答题目的问题。比如你在《我最喜欢的运动》,你要回答你最喜欢的运动到底是什么。 如果你在写《我喜欢的老师》,那你非要回答你最喜欢的老师是谁。可是,仅仅一句话是不能解决问题的。你要联想一下自己,所以你不能只写一个干巴巴的句子。 我在这里给你写三个作文《我最喜欢的老师》,《我最喜欢的运动》和 《我最喜欢的季节》,给你看看应该怎么写才好。
My Favorite Teacher
You favorite teacher may be a teacher who taught you a few years ago, but you can not actually finish an article about her within 5 minutes. I would suggest that you write about the teacher who is going to read this article and who is going to grade it. Once you have the teacher in your mind, you can write ike this:
My favorite teacher is Ms. Gaver. She is a very nice teacher because even if I write such a short article, she is still going to say, “Good Job!”
我最喜欢的老师
你最喜欢的老师可能是几年前教过你的老师, 可是你很难在1分钟里面把他给写清楚。我建议你写会读你这个文章的老师。一旦你想清楚是哪个老师的时候,你可以这么写:
我最喜欢的老师是Gaver小姐. 她是一个很善良的老师,因为即使我写一个这么短的文章,她还是会说, “写得不错!”
My Favorite Sports
Your favorite sports may be hockey, swimming, basketball, etc. But if you really like it, then you must have a lot of things to talk about: coaches, teammates, friends, training experience, tears and laughters in games --- so many things that you won't be able to organize in one minute. You really want to pick something so simple that you can finish with a few sentences. You can write something like this:
It took me a really long time to think what sports that I had participated in, but I could not think of any. But each day I did walk to the bus stop in the morning and walk back from the bus stop in the afternoon. So my favorite sports is technically walking to and from the bus stop.
我最喜欢的运动
你最喜欢的运动可能是游泳,冰球或者打篮球. 可是如果你真的喜欢它的话, 那你会有很多比赛,很多队友, 很多回忆, 很多故事。这么多东西是很难在一分钟内写清楚的。 所以你要找一个很快就能写完的运动. 所以你可以这么写:
我想了很久也都没有想到我参加什么运动。可是每天早上我都会走到汽车站,每天下午我都会从汽车站走回家. 所以我最喜欢的运动是理论上是从汽车站走去走回。
My Favorite Season
I would suggest you to write about the season that is happening right now because you can get plenty of ideas by just looking outside the window.
Looking outside the window, I see that summer is passing. My favorite season is about to end, and I am kept here writing the story. That's not fair. I want to go out to play in the last days of my favorite season.
我最喜欢的季节
我建议你写现在正在发生的季节。因为仅仅看看窗户外面,你就能有很多写作的好主意。
看看窗外,夏天已经快要过去了。我最喜欢的季节快要结束了。可是我还在家里写作文呢。这也太不公平了。在夏季的最后的日子里, 我想要到外面去玩。
The articles above may earn you 1 point, but there is still a risk that you can 0 point. To be safe, let me teach you another fun technique so that you can definitely get 1 point. This technique is called “Hidden Treasure”. We all know the concept called “Show, not tell”. You can define a keyword for your article but you must not say it out. Instead, use hints and details to present it to the reader. Let me rewrite the three stories above, with keywords hidden.
上面的作文可能会得到一个分,可是你还是有可能会得0分。为了保险起见,我再教你一个另外的有趣的技巧,你肯定能及格的。这个技巧叫做 “隐藏的财报”。 我们都知道这个 “Show, not tell”的概念。你可以给你的文章找一个关键词。可是你千万不能把它给写出来。你用细节和暗示把它的呈现给读者。让我用这个技巧这样重写上面三个作文。
My Favorite Teacher
The hidden word I want to use for this article is Kindness
Ms. Gaver always talks softly with a smile staining on her lips. She has this specially capability to find something good in her students even though they are doing a bad job. For example, even if I write such a short article about her, she is still going to be amused and say, “Well, it is still nice. I know that you were in a rush.” Because of this, she is my favorite teacher.
我最喜欢的老师
隐藏的词汇是和善
Gaver小姐说话的声音很轻,她的嘴角总是挂着笑容。即使的她的学生做得不好的时候,她总能找到学生的优点。比如, 即使我写这么短一篇作文,她还是会微笑着说, “这篇作文还是可以的, 我知道你时间很紧。”因为如此,她是我最喜欢的老师。
My Favorite Sports
The hidden word I want to hide in this article is Laziness
I laid in my couch, munching on a bag of barbeque flavored chip, while thinking about what sports that I had participated in. I finished the whole bag and I could not think of any. But each day I did walk to the bus stop in the morning and come back from in the afternoon. So my only sports was technically walking to and from the bus stop. Wait a minute, I didn't really enjoy going to the bus stop! I did like coming back from the bus stop, because I knew my soft, squishy, fluffy and soothing pillow would be waiting for me in my couch. So walking back from the bus stop was my favorite sports!
我最喜欢的运动
我要在这篇作文里面藏懒这个词
我躺在沙发里, 嚼着一袋烧烤风味的土豆片, 一边想着我参加过那种运动. 我把一袋都吃完了可是我还是想不出来我参加过哪个运动。不过每天我确实都在早上走去汽车站,在下午从汽车站走回家. 所以我参与的运动只是在汽车站和家之间走路. 等等, 我并不喜欢走去汽车站去上学,但是我确实喜欢从汽车站走回家, 因为我知道我的柔软的,好捏的,蓬松的,舒适的大枕头在我的沙发上等着我的。所以从车站走回家是我最喜欢的运动!
My Favorite Season
I want to hide the secret keyword Sadness in the writing.
The cicadas are no longer chirping outside the window. I noticed that on my calendar, the page for August should be turned over next Monday. My favorite season is about to finish, and I am kept here writing the story. That's not fair. I want to go out to enjoy the last a few good days of summer. I already started to miss the sunshine that seemed so annoying only a few weeks ago. Goodbye my trip to China, Goodbye my Hockey Science Camp, Goodbye, my summer vacation. See you next year.
我最喜欢的季节
我想要把悲伤藏在我的文字里
窗外的知了已经不唱歌了。日历上的八月快要翻过去了. 我最喜欢的季节马上就要结束, 可是我还是被关在这里写作文. 太不公平了. 我想出去再最后享受几天这个季节的好日子. 我现在已经开始怀念前几天还很讨厌的阳光了。再见,我去中国的旅程, 再见,我的冰球夏令营, 再见,我的暑假。 明年再见。
My friends, would you like to share with me some of your 1 point articles? I'd like to publish some of them in my wechat posts.
朋友们,你们想不想和我分享你们写的刚及格的作文? 我想这里发表几篇你们写的文章。
I write in my bed, on the couch, on the floor and mostly on my desk. I write a lot, but that does not mean that I like writing. You may ask me, "Why do you write frequently if you don't like to?"
Well, do you poop everyday? But do you like it?
我在我的床上写,在沙发上写,在地上写,我最多还是在我的书桌上写的。 我写这么多,可是那并不代表我喜欢习作。你可能会问我:“为什么不喜欢你还老写呢?”
嗯,你每天拉粑粑么?但是你喜欢拉么?
I write because I have to. I had to write my homework. I need write a birthday card to enter a birthday party. My daddy always "made" me write stories. Sometimes I had to write important messages to my friends, for which, I wrote in secret languages that I invented.
我写作是因为我非写不可。我必须做我的作文作业。我非要写一个生日卡才能去一个生日派对。 我的爸爸老是逼我写故事。 有的时候,我要给朋友写很重要的消息。当然我是用我自己发明的秘密的语言写这些消息的。
Similarly, I wait at the bus stop all the time, but that doesn't mean that I like waiting under the summer sun. What I like is to ride inside the bus with the AC belowing cool air into my face, the beautiful changing landscapes outside the window, watching the bus driver handling the bus, and finally the happniess of arriving at my destination.
类似的,我经常在汽车站等车。 可是那不说明我喜欢在夏天的太阳底下等公交。我喜欢的是车里凉快的空调, 窗外变化的景色,仔细观察司机是怎么开车的,以及到达目的地的幸福喜悦。
Writing itself is painful but I earn a lot of rewards in the end, like small paychecks and gifts from the publishers. My teachers will give me good scores on my homework. My daddy gives me 25 cents for every good essay I write, but I think 1 dollar should be more reasonable.
习作本身是很累的但是最后我能得到很多东西, 比如出版社会给一些礼物和小额支票。老师会给我的作业好的分数。 每当我写一个好作文,我爸爸也会给我25分钱,可是我觉得1块钱更加合理。
Even though there are rewards, I still do not like writing. However, by degrees, I am starting to enjoy the smoothness of my pencil rubbing against the paper, and the fluency of my story running down like a waterfall. I like to gaze outside the window, thinking about what my storyline is going to be like, meanwhile adding a whimsical sense of humor between the lines.
虽然有奖励,可是我还是不喜欢写作。尽管如此,我现在已经开始有点喜欢我的铅笔在纸上沙沙的感觉。我喜欢故事象瀑布下落那么流畅。当我想情节的时候,我喜欢看着窗外发呆的感觉。
As I fully understand the kind of ordeal that you have to go through in writing, I would like to write homework for you for only 1 dollar. In my published stories, if you want the protagonist to have your name, then you can pay me 5 dollars. If you want your appearance to be customizable in my story, then you need to pay me 10 dollars. If you want to have your own story lines and endings, then you have to pay me at least 50 dollars.
我知道写作是一件很痛苦的事情,所以如果你给我一美元的话,我愿意帮你写作业的。 在我发表的故事里, 如果你想要主角有的名字的话,你需要给我5美元。如果你想要的长相变成你想要的样子的话,那你必须给我10块钱。 如果你想有你自己的故事情节和结尾的话,那你至少要给我50美元。
But if you already have your characters, your own story lines, and endings, then you already have your own story. Why do you want to pay me?
如果你已经有了你自己的人物,情节和结尾, 那你已经有你自己的故事了。你何必给我钱呢?
刚搜了下魔法铅笔,出来很多个,不知道是哪个呢?