《Two Straight Lines》|Re:《五个字留给自己》(@我的大缅因猫叫Tiger)

暮子默
楼主 (文学城)

这是我前两周写的一首歌《两条直线》。中文原版我已经送人了,没法贴出来。但我昨天听了大猫的《五个字留给自己》,没忍住,决定贴这首歌的英文版,从女性视角写了两人关系摇摇欲坠时的那种无力、疲惫和心碎。这下子,一对为爱所苦的痴情男女就到齐了(^_-)。

Two Straight Lines

Lyrics: Mu,Zimo Music&Vocals:Suno

I chase, you run, we're pulling tight
Exhausted, is there any hope in sight?
Another fight that’s mine alone
Your silence feels like a wall of stone
Ooh~
Trapped in pain, with memories to hold
The last sweet moments, now growing cold

In the quiet room, I lie awake
My tears fall, but you don’t see my pain
You turn away, no words to share
Leaving nothing but silence in the air

Oh~
I just wish we could grow and heal
Be the ones who stand and never fail
I keep asking why we drift away
Why can't we go back to yesterday?
Oh~

I thought we were a perfect pair
But two straight lines don’t meet anywhere
Oh~
I just wish we could grow and heal
Be the ones who stand and never fail
I keep asking why we drift away
Why can't we go back to yesterday?
Hmm~

I thought we were a perfect pair
But two straight lines don’t meet anywhere
Oh~
I just wish we could grow and heal
Be the ones who stand and never fail
Despite my efforts, I...
I thought we were a perfect pair
But two straight lines don’t meet anywhere
Oh~

I just wish we could grow and heal
Be the ones who stand and never fail
Despite my efforts, I just can’t see
How I can make a miracle for you and me
I thought we were a perfect pair
But two straight lines don’t meet anywhere

 

艾唱
从词到曲儿到小苏的演绎,这都是一首很完整完美的作品,很喜欢很有feel,赞子墨和小苏!
我的大缅因猫叫Tiger
好有感觉的一首英文歌曲,看来我的歌把你的歌招来了啊。我觉得Suno的英文歌比中文歌更有感觉,可能因为是它的母语。
艾唱
片片拍的也很美很美哦!
暮子默
其实我更喜欢中文原版,也非常非常有Feel,那种无力感和破碎感更强

Suno写prompt的时候可以用关键词标注曲风、乐器、节奏和情绪。

我这首歌(中、英版)的Prompt是: A soft, emotional ballad with slow tempo, highlighting themes of longing, distance, and emotional tension, female singer。其实那些不重要的介词都可以省略。我在Suno上也跟很多大神学到了非常多。

结尾部分我用Extend功能修改过,所以情绪有起伏就更饱满了。

我的大缅因猫叫Tiger
谢谢分享。很想听一下。
暮子默
谢谢小艾夸奖~ 争取学习更多厉害的新技能写更多好听的歌曲。:-)
艾唱
不客气哦,一起加油,共同进步。
艾唱
我一般就是加好多的形容词,给他更多的选择,然后我也可以多些选择。
暮子默
不客气,希望你喜欢!
暮子默
我以前也和你这样,可是

可是这样出好歌的几率有点低,浪费了好多credits。我后来在Suno上看人家大神出的热门好曲,发现有的prompts甚至非常短,但目标很明确,关键就是曲风、情绪、速度。这是我向大神们学习的心得:一开始就明确自己歌曲的构思和设计会非常有帮助,能出好曲不单单靠Suno的神力,还有你作为幕后“大佬”的指挥能力:配乐设计+歌词编排+修改(crop/extend)。

艾唱
学习了:)