【岁末文艺赛】平水韵七绝: 梦访渊明

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renqiulan
楼主 (文学城)

三径空寻五柳踪
篱前菊影几多重
无言独立南山下
不肯低头始见峰

外一首打油

雅蚁

世道难行只许爬
不如归隐老陶家
欣然禁足东篱外
赏罢诗文啃菊花

In one of his famous quotes, Confucius implied that he would stay afloat as a man of conscience even if those in power meant to keep him down.

Drunk or sober, Táo Yuānmíng understood Confucius more than he might care to admit. Blessed with the legacy of his great grandfather (Táo Kǎn), he proudly turned his back on the rotten officialdom and returned to his long-forgotten place of origin as a landowner-farmer.

Yuānmíng, however, was never a true hermit. As a matter of fact, he enjoyed socializing however defined. At the same time, he embraced nature whole-heartedly. His literary works concurred with that.

Not only was Yuānmíng close to nature, he was also close to where a major confluence of Confucianism, Taoism and Buddhism was taking place, which would in time end up as a powerful current of thought across China.

纫秋兰原创

 

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浮云驰
老陶归隐也有难言之隐,生活还是那个生活
n
nearby
喜欢这句"不肯低头始见峰"
r
renqiulan
谢谢!渊明毕竟是名相之后,当个区区彭泽令,怎样也不舒服的。有田地,有奴仆,愁哪?
r
renqiulan
谢谢!拙句正是所谓“诗眼”。
l
lovecat08
你去梦访陶渊明,他怎不请你喝菊花茶?
l
lovecat08
俺看不出“诗眼”在哪儿?大概诗人才有眼看出!
r
renqiulan
.咱们洋人说的 punch line.
r
renqiulan
三径空寻五柳踪,空寻了,遑论讨茶?再者,此君自说酒不离口的,又自说家贫,待客以菊花茶,难矣哉!
l
lovecat08
胆特大的,敢仿陶佬的名诗,我只敢仿nearby的。
r
renqiulan
击鼓鸣冤啦!东晋尚无唐宋格律诗体。仆虽不敏,何至于隔世剽窃哉?知你开玩笑的,哈哈!
n
nearby
邻兄的诗其实也很难仿的,得有一颗永远初恋的心才能 :-)
梧桐之丘
油打的不错:尝罢诗文啃菊花。很调皮,生动。
l
lovecat08
恨!说不过你。哎!好奇,你学过几年中文啊?为何到粤语的香港学啊?一般都在北京,台北学啊。。。。。。
东风再起
陶渊明是否还是更近道家?
l
lovecat08
俺不白啃菊花,俺拿它炒菜!
l
lovecat08
呵呵呵呵呵。。。。。。。。。。
r
renqiulan
可以这么答吧:俺格外喜欢驻港的美国领使馆。
r
renqiulan
在下奉劝尊敬的爱猫版主:NO COPYCAT!
l
lovecat08
给你算个命,如果你去国务院工作,20年后,你会成北京美大使馆的重要把手。
r
renqiulan
谢谢先生!啃萄花比啃老好吧。
l
lovecat08
快答!你学几年中文?才学成这华山派的掌门绝功?
r
renqiulan
谢谢先生赐评,秋兰和议。老庄思想,确是江左诸君所依。
r
renqiulan
这是“餐英”啊,洒脱超俗!
r
renqiulan
岂知纫某人不是明日驻华大使?哈哈!
l
lovecat08
明日太早,你那年轻气盛的个性,还得磨上几圈,政治家哪那么好当的?
r
renqiulan
说真的,我只知其皮毛。
r
renqiulan
来生也太早呢,所以自我“哈哈”了
l
lovecat08
几年?沙锅已打破?不说,不理你了。
r
renqiulan
实话实说,从牙牙学语的时候开始。
l
lovecat08
难怪,聪明+早学。沙锅,你说你父母非汉学家,纯美国人,为何要如此早就让你学汉语?Addams family?
l
lovecat08
哦!我想明白了。不再提问。
r
renqiulan
卒然有此一问。香港人可能会有这样反应的:唔通想起我底?莫非想查问身世?当然不是。一句话:因缘巧合。答了等于没答。罪过。
中间小谢
A punch in the eye

Resulted in a poem with a good line

 

中间小谢
最後一行有味,语帶相關。讚。

不肯低頭始見峯。陶淵明實柔中有剛。

r
renqiulan
Point taken.Thanks! Yes, it isn't very easy on the eyes.
n
nearby
仿诗是学习、提高,欢迎仿。
r
renqiulan
At last, someone is reading my mind. Thanks a million!
l
lovecat08
恭喜!找到知音!
r
renqiulan
绿灯亮了,看见雅量。
r
renqiulan
谢谢,恭祝圣诞快乐!