Two shadows 更多的影子

颤音
楼主 (文学城)

Two shadows


Two shadows
lie perpendicular
impossible
only one visible

Two shadows
one from birth
one from death

Two shadows
one from hell
one from heaven

Tow shadows
the sun and the moon
to the finish line
Is there a shrine


© 8 hours ago
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Likes: Jeff Kaminski, Dark Migration, Alice G

Alice G - I love your style, and the poem made me really think. I love it!

3 hours ago 

Jeff Kaminski - i like the imagery present throughout this piece, and the rhythm of it

 

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ling_yin_shi
一影颤,不如两影颤。:)
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nearby
颤音与shadows杠上了。写得很入味
梧桐之丘
灵!
尘凡无忧
真是跟shadow 玩儿上了啊。:)颤音的眼神厉害,这首诗里面的shadow 一半我都没见过。。。:)
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LittleEasy
Profound sense
忒忒绿
great imagination:)
颤音
谢谢!对极了!
颤音
谢谢
颤音
谢谢邻兄!眼里只有影子
颤音
谢谢无忧!梦里啥都能看见!
颤音
谢谢easy!
颤音
谢谢绿
颤音
有人看出了最后是 TOW 而不是 TWO shadows 了吗?哈哈哈
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ling_yin_shi
确实没有,只顾跟你颤,眼也颤花了。