我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
R_0512 发表于 2025-07-06 08:21 我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
回复 1楼 R_0512 的帖子 放到 chatgpt 里去 grade 了一下 Grade: A (Excellent) 🧠 Content & Creativity: 10/10Strengths: The essay is exceptionally imaginative and original. The opening immerses the reader in the world of an ant, and the transition into a reflective tone is smooth and powerful. Impressive metaphors: “Curtains of nature lifted,” “metropolises crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time,” and “tiny Atlases” are vivid and advanced for a 12-year-old. Depth of thought: The student conveys a mature appreciation for nature and small creatures, encouraging readers to look beyond appearances. 🏗️ Organization & Structure: 9/10Strengths: Clear structure with an engaging introduction, a strong descriptive middle, and a thoughtful conclusion. Minor note: A concluding sentence that ties the observations back to a personal takeaway could make the ending feel more complete. 📝 Grammar, Usage, & Mechanics: 9/10Strengths: Nearly flawless grammar, sentence variety, and advanced vocabulary for this age group. Minor suggestions: “Waking up from one of your several short naps” could be smoother—perhaps “Waking from one of your many short naps.” The phrase “curtains of nature lifted” is metaphorical and beautiful, but might be a touch abstract for some readers at this level. 🎨 Style & Voice: 10/10 This student clearly has a distinctive voice—elevated, poetic, and reflective. The personification of nature is especially impressive for this age. 💡 Final Comments: This essay demonstrates extraordinary writing skill, insight, and creativity for a 12-year-old. It reads like a thoughtful, lyrical meditation on the hidden strength of small creatures and nature's design. With just a little more polish in structure and clarity, it could stand as a high school-level piece.
我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care. R_0512 发表于 2025-07-06 08:21
R_0512 发表于 2025-07-06 08:21 我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
R_0512 发表于 2025-07-06 08:21 我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
R_0512 发表于 2025-07-06 08:21 我家12岁娃最近刚放暑假，这几天就带他逛逛博物馆，发现他在自然历史博物馆里对虫子特别好奇，趴在蚂蚁窝前可以看好久好久，我很不解，后来回家他把感受写下来，我看了一惊，从来没参加过补习班的娃能写出这样的短文，平时也不练习写作的，就老师课上的classwork写一写，经常回来跟我说老师夸他写作好，没作业，我也没见过他的classwork，一直以来我都以为他没啥特别了，就是一个乖宝宝而已。 A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you. This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
以前我一直以为写作好的前提是一定要阅读很多，直到我们看到了老二的英语老师的评语 “The best writer I have ever met during my 25 years tenure" 老二一年读过的书不及老大一个月读的，比较了两人的文章，老二的的确"Head and shoulders above" 所以我现在相信天赋......
A bustling sound fills the chamber. Waking up from one of your several short naps, you open your eyes. Everyone is moving. Some are carrying huge chunks of food with their mandibles. Others are coming back from their shifts to rest. Still others are climbing up to the upper floors and, eventually, above ground. You stretch and test your antennae. There is a long day ahead of you.
This is what the perspective of an ant might look like. As I watched through the small glass wall, awe wrapped its arms around me. The curtains of nature lifted, revealing the metropolises she crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time. She showed us the complexity of life—that focusing solely on size is like only looking at the hummock of an iceberg. These tiny Atlases carry their burdens with an air of pride, serving their queen with utmost loyalty. They endure the cascades of rain, march over any obstacle, and trek through heat that could bring a human to their knees. They fight a constant war against their surroundings to survive. These ants demonstrate the strength of the progeny born from nature’s loving care.
我娃每天写故事，他喜欢写，但是写出来的东西不忍直视😂，写作靠天赋不靠努力，羡慕有天赋的孩子～
这绝对可以往作家方向发展了
真羡慕native speaker小孩，写得真好，来美国几十年也写不出来
我家娃从小就很爱看书
放到 chatgpt 里去 grade 了一下
Grade: A (Excellent)
🧠 Content & Creativity: 10/10 Strengths: The essay is exceptionally imaginative and original. The opening immerses the reader in the world of an ant, and the transition into a reflective tone is smooth and powerful. Impressive metaphors: “Curtains of nature lifted,” “metropolises crafted with the chisels of evolution and the mallet of time,” and “tiny Atlases” are vivid and advanced for a 12-year-old. Depth of thought: The student conveys a mature appreciation for nature and small creatures, encouraging readers to look beyond appearances. 🏗️ Organization & Structure: 9/10 Strengths: Clear structure with an engaging introduction, a strong descriptive middle, and a thoughtful conclusion. Minor note: A concluding sentence that ties the observations back to a personal takeaway could make the ending feel more complete. 📝 Grammar, Usage, & Mechanics: 9/10 Strengths: Nearly flawless grammar, sentence variety, and advanced vocabulary for this age group. Minor suggestions: “Waking up from one of your several short naps” could be smoother—perhaps “Waking from one of your many short naps.” The phrase “curtains of nature lifted” is metaphorical and beautiful, but might be a touch abstract for some readers at this level. 🎨 Style & Voice: 10/10 This student clearly has a distinctive voice—elevated, poetic, and reflective. The personification of nature is especially impressive for this age. 💡 Final Comments: This essay demonstrates extraordinary writing skill, insight, and creativity for a 12-year-old. It reads like a thoughtful, lyrical meditation on the hidden strength of small creatures and nature's design. With just a little more polish in structure and clarity, it could stand as a high school-level piece.
我闺女也是。
孩子有写作天赋！😍
自然细腻地给我们刻写了一幅栩栩如生的画，还散发着一股生活气息呢！😍
是的是的，最后还有自然而然的对于生命，自然，社会的思考的升华。
恭喜娃妈啊！
写得真好啊
点赞，收藏！12岁孩子作文
我今天也看了我家娃写的故事，和娃自己比还是有进步的🤭
嗯，他很爱阅读，而且每一段时间喜欢的书都不一样，7岁就读完哈利波特系列，8岁爱上greek mythology，现在喜欢上古典文学
果然没有意外啊，爱读才会写。。。隐形自推型啊
我家娃在一个很差的公立初中（4/10），所以孩子回来跟我说老师夸他写作好时，我没太上心，学校应该学不到什么鬼，主要靠孩子自己很喜欢阅读，纽约6/26才放暑假，最近带孩子玩了一个星期，才发现他写作又快又好
哎，我家的天天就看口水书，看起来还是要引导一下啊。
我们也才放一个礼拜，大公校
娃真的太牛了。羡慕死了
私校放假特别早。我们申请的一家纽约的6月6日就是她们学校的最后一天了。而纽约的公立是六月底。
嗯，是，我家娃小学是在私校，都很早放假
Chisels of evolution and mallet of time. 这就是天赋啊。
写的很有美感
作为12岁孩子的小短文，写的真棒！观察细致，行文流畅生动，感慨发的也超出普通12岁的深度。作家潜质啊。
果然天赋是妈生的，不怎么练习也没补习，一写出来就灵气十足。天赋使然。
为啥这么选择，从私校到4分公校？不方便回答就算了。
私校里就我儿子一个亚裔，5年级时因为送礼没送到位（有个家长带头说每个家庭收200刀给老师买礼物，我以为跟往年一样不用在私下送礼了），第二天课堂上，有一个老师发感谢卡，唯独没给我家娃，我家娃很难过，回来跟我说就他没有感谢卡。我发邮件问老师，老师说要私下再给个礼物才会有感谢卡，我很气愤，就退学回公立学校了，我当初买房时没考虑学区，本想一路私校到大学，zone school就4分，哈哈哈
native speakers 一般也写不出
还有个体感悟
我塞，这太夸张了。我们就只送了35块。我不知道她们是不是额外送，我反正没有。
擦，这是哪个学校哪个老师？name shame
学校和老师名字就不方便透露了，只能说那么多好的私立学校，那么多好老师，就我踩坑了
写得真好，灵气十足！LZ好福气！
with sir david attenborough's dubbing 😍
老师这个回答太恶心了。200刀还不够？ 我们十分公校，娃有两个主要老师，我们除了交给班妈的25以外，给了每个老师五十的礼卡，老师非常开心，写了很漂亮的感谢卡回来。
什么破私校校风师德败坏，配不上你家娃，早发现早出坑
请问楼主，你家娃几岁开始认字的呢？ 天才啊
会不会是娃从小在私校里摸爬滚打，所以写作能力才这么强大？
你们学校好奇怪啊。我们学年末都是家长凑钱，class parent去给老师送的，但是所有人都签字了。我们现在的学校是太diverse了，用一个拉丁裔的爸爸的话来说，完全不符合社会的情况。
太羡慕你儿子啦。我女儿作文我还给找了个老师，每周一次，上两个学年的课了，还是这种动不动就freeze的状态。
3岁上学才开始识字
那个私校是学费就1万多的的教会私校，behavior抓得很好，写作就不太清楚了，平时娃不写作的，这次让他写一写是因为我前一段时间跟个ABC聊天，他说写作很难很重要，我就好奇我家娃，就让他随便写一写给我看看
可能写作需要大量阅读来积累，不是靠补习
以前我一直以为写作好的前提是一定要阅读很多，直到我们看到了老二的英语老师的评语
“The best writer I have ever met during my 25 years tenure"
老二一年读过的书不及老大一个月读的，比较了两人的文章，老二的的确"Head and shoulders above"
所以我现在相信天赋......
我也相信天赋，不是每个阅读量大的人都会写作，但是写作能力强的人阅读量都大